TPO 53 Writing IntegratedMany countries require cigarette smokers to pay particularly high taxes on their purchases of cigarettes; similar taxes are being considered for unhealthy foods. The policy of imposing high taxes on cigarettes and other unhealthy

The reading and the lecture both discuss the benefits of high taxes on cigarettes and unhealthy foods. The author feels that high taxes on these unhealthy products has benefits for the society. The lecturer however, casts doubt on these benefits and claims that such benefits are easily challenged.

To begin with, the author argues that these taxes prevent people from buying these products and discourages their unhealthy behavior. It is also mentioned in the reading that such taxes have reduced smoking and it can reduce obesity if imposed on unhealthy food. The lecturer is of a different opinion saying that such taxes can force smokers into buying cheaper cigarettes which pose even a greater threat to their health. As for the unhealthy food the lecturer states that people that pursue these kinds of food will continue doing so and spend more and consequently, they will end up having less money to buy healthier foods.

Secondly the reading suggests that these taxes are fair, since it is unfair that both people who don't pursue destructive habits and those who do should equally contribute to covering medical costs. The lecturer challenges this argument of fairness by stating that these taxes don't take into consideration the people's income and they put much more pressure on a smoker with low income compared to one with a higher income.

Finally, the author mentions that these kinds of taxes increases revenue for the government and in turn the government can spend this revenue on projects that will benefit society. In contrast the lecturer states that this increase in revenue can make governments dependent on these taxes so in order to not lose this extra revenue the government would not pursue other policies which are more helpful such is making smoking in public places forbidden or other policies that could lead the government not benefit from these taxes.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... products has benefits for the society. The lecturer however, casts doubt on these ...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ues that these taxes prevent people from buying these products and discourages th...
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Line 5, column 98, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...since it is unfair that both people who dont pursue destructive habits and those who...
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Line 5, column 277, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...of fairness by stating that these taxes dont take into consideration the peoples inc...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
... taxes dont take into consideration the peoples income and they put much more pressure ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... compared to one with a higher income. Finally, the author mentions that these ...
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Line 7, column 185, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
... projects that will benefit society. In contrast the lecturer states that this increase ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, however, if, second, secondly, so, as for, in contrast, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 22.412803532 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1584.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 311.0 270.72406181 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09324758842 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36824960619 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501607717042 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 482.4 419.366225166 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.9512695068 49.2860985944 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.0 110.228320801 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2727272727 21.698381199 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.36363636364 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236307245747 0.272083759551 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1198474346 0.0996497079465 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931936902282 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152977764797 0.162205337803 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074186206632 0.0443174109184 167% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.3589403974 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.2367328918 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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