TPO 54. The Salton Sea in California is actually a salty inland lake. The level of salt in the lake's water—what scientists call its salinity—has been increasing steadily for years because the lake's water is evaporating faster than it is being repla

The reading and the lecture are both about the salinity of Salton sea in California and solutions to reduce its salinity in order to save it from too much evaporation and excess levels of salinity. the author of the reading feels that the lake would eventually become too salty to support the life of the living organisms that live within it and they think there are several ways to reduce the effect of evaporation. the lecturer challenges the claims made by the author. she is of the opinion that while the solutions offered by the author could reduce salinity and save the lake, they are not perfect solutions and without faults.

To begin with the author suggests that one way of reducing the salinity of the lake is directly removing salt from it by constructing facilities that can heat the lake water in order to evaporate it so that the salt and minerals would be left behind in a special chamber and the water would be returned to the lake without salt. the lecturer however challenges this argument. she claims that while essentially evaporating water in order to reduce its salinity could work, but the minerals that are left behind by the evaporation could be toxic like Selenium which pose a health threat to people if its inhaled after getting spread by the wind.

Secondly the author argues that the salinity of the lake could be reduced by injecting water from the ocean and diluting it. the article mentions that this method needs pipelines and canals for the ocean water delivery. the lecturer however, rebuts this by saying that building canals and pipelines are costly specially over the long distance that they need to be built and the government may not accept funding the project.

Finally the author suggests that the salinity can be reduced by building walls and dividing the lake into different parts. in the article it is stated that the ocean water could be delivered into the main larger part of the lake while the smaller part can increase in salinity. the lecturer opposes this by mentioning that the area the lake is located is prone to earthquakes and seismic activities. so dividing the lake by building walls can end up failing because earthquakes can destroy the walls and the water in the lake will eventually get mixed.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 5.04856512141 317% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 22.412803532 147% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 30.3222958057 181% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1373.03311258 137% => OK
No of words: 391.0 270.72406181 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80306905371 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38592471731 2.5805825403 92% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 145.348785872 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437340153453 0.540411800872 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 602.1 419.366225166 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.257144213 49.2860985944 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.142857143 110.228320801 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.9285714286 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 7.06452816374 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298701784922 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104633234806 0.0996497079465 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736274031404 0.0662205650399 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184996734998 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457855189802 0.0443174109184 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.3589403974 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 53.8541721854 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.0289183223 114% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.2367328918 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.42419426049 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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