TPO 43- integrated writing

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TPO 43- integrated writing

The passage and the lecture discuss whether theseveral different teories that those are posed in reading are correct or not. The reading expresses that agnostids according to their families do activities like them. Whereas, the lecture mentions that the presented evidence are not strong and refutes them.
First, The reading claims that as primitives arthropods were strong swimmer and predators; therefore, the agnostids also had same characteristics. However, the professor in the lecture points out that the agnostids were animals with weak eyes, roughly they were blind; thus, the predator attribute is not reasonable because the predators need to strong eyes for prey, however, the agnostids prey on sensory methods.
Moreover, The passage believes that it is more likely that they were dewelled in seafloor due to they could be alive by scavenging dead or by grazing on bacteria. Nevertheless, the woman in the lecture disagrees with this statements due to the place that the remain fossils were found is far away from the seafloor. otherwise, the agnostids were not able to move fast or a large distance; therefore, they could not live on seafloor.
Finally, the passage declares that there is evidence that approve the agnostids were parasites; so, they feeding off larger animals. Although, the lecturer refutes this idea with this statement that the agnostids were a huge number in population; hence, if they had feed off animals, the animals would have dead because of the large number of parasites are killer for animals even large animals.
Although the passage expresses three different evidence to confirm the idea that the agnostids had been lived like their families and present them, the lecture has negative opinion about these idea and rejects them with strong evidence.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 255, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...h this statements due to the place that the remain fossils were found is far away from the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Otherwise
...re found is far away from the seafloor. otherwise, the agnostids were not able to move fa...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 188, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this idea' or 'these ideas'?
Suggestion: this idea; these ideas
... the lecture has negative opinion about these idea and rejects them with strong evidence.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 30.3222958057 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 286.0 270.72406181 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27972027972 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55695549808 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.534965034965 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 419.366225166 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.23620309051 182% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.8199197617 49.2860985944 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.272727273 110.228320801 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.54545454545 7.06452816374 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384967562925 0.272083759551 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149470226835 0.0996497079465 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833340904542 0.0662205650399 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20574914665 0.162205337803 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0965656803408 0.0443174109184 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.3589403974 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 53.8541721854 68% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.0289183223 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.64 12.2367328918 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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