TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task

The reading passages questions that if bees were existed 200 million years ago and provides three skeptical reasons which replies negatively to the question. In contrary, the lectures refute the points by emphasizing that the arguments of skeptical were not convincing and asserts that the nests fossils found from the ancient years were perfectly possible made by bees and she supports her idea by three specific reasons.
First, the author claims that researchers have not found any fossils of bees referring to the years. Conversely, the professor explains that it is true that no fossils of bees were found backing to the certain period of time, however, it does not necessarily mean that there was not any bee. She puts her idea forward by demonstrating that bee’s fossils need to be preserved in a resin material produced by specific trees. The trees were rare and no tree did not produce the right resin to preserve bees.
Second, while the text posits that there was absence of flowering-plant in the period of time, the speaker avers that bees did not rely on the flowering-plants that time. This means that there are some evidences which shows non-flowering trees such as pine trees which preceded the flowering-plants were the feeding source of bees. Also, time passing and emerging flowering-plants bees adapted themselves to new source of food.
Third, the passage illustrates that there are some lacks in details, namely cape, of the nests structure belonging to the years. However, the professor explains that chemical analysis evidences reveals that the details were included in the structure. Although it might be decomposed, but the cap in nowadays hives has a waterproof chemical combination and the researchers have found distinctive waterproof material in the fossils.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 211, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... bees were found backing to the certain period of time, however, it does not necessarily mean ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 80, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...e was absence of flowering-plant in the period of time, the speaker avers that bees did not re...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...apted themselves to new source of food. Third, the passage illustrates that ther...
^^^
Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...ugh it might be decomposed, but the cap in nowadays hives has a waterproof chemical combina...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, third, while, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 12.0772626932 149% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 30.3222958057 99% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 1373.03311258 110% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22837370242 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83841655111 2.5805825403 110% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 145.348785872 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536332179931 0.540411800872 99% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.1219515629 49.2860985944 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.916666667 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0833333333 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06452816374 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0843495571477 0.272083759551 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0332875302602 0.0996497079465 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.00936403142748 0.0662205650399 14% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0493900745366 0.162205337803 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116620810779 0.0443174109184 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.3589403974 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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