TPO-45 - Integrated Writing TaskDid bees (a type of insect) exist on Earth as early as 200 million years ago? Such a theory is supported by the discovery of very old fossil structures that resemble bee nests. The structures have been found inside 200- mi

In this reading, a theory that some fossil structures were created by bees is suspected due to three reasons, which was reputed by the lecture. According to the lecture, the fossils structures were produced by bees.

First of all, the reading claims that no actual fossil structures of bees before 200 million years ago were found according to the history, however, it is explained by that lecture that the body of bees were not preserved at that period. A special tree is considered to preserve the body of the bees and they were so rare 200 million years ago. The number of the trees increase later than that period.

In addition, the reason of the absence of flowering plants is also unconvincing in this lecture. Though the flower and bees have a mutual relationship, the bees still exist even before the flowering plants appears. However, the bees were not fed by flowering plants, but by other food such as pinetrees. The relationship has taken the lead of the bees’ food since the flowers appeared.

Furthermore, the reading assumes that the structures are lacking in special details bees’ nests. In the contrary, more evidence is provided in the lecture. For example, they have distinct chemical composition which is the same as the material that bees use in modern times. So the assumption cannot prove that the theory is wrong as well.

In conclusion, the disagreements of the theory that the fossil structures are not created by bees in the reading are reputed in this lecture. The professor argues that the supposition of lacking in history, the absence of bees’ food and inadequate details are unconvincing according to the above explanations.

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Average: 0.3 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, so, still, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 30.3222958057 129% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1405.0 1373.03311258 102% => OK
No of words: 279.0 270.72406181 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03584229391 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7263949228 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.469534050179 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 429.3 419.366225166 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 2.5761589404 194% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.7121682934 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.6666666667 110.228320801 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 21.698381199 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 7.06452816374 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0805605542597 0.272083759551 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331375232074 0.0996497079465 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0181127802001 0.0662205650399 27% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0501603978093 0.162205337803 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.014276769565 0.0443174109184 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.2367328918 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.7273730684 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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