TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading passages discusses an interesting topic about the benefits of replace medical paper record by electronic medical records, and provides intensive information, and reasons of support. However, the lecture casts doubts on the arguments exposed by the reading passage. The lecturer thinks the advantages in the use of electronical records are not so evident as the reading passage claims and refutes every of their arguments.

First of all, the reading passages sustains that one big benefit of the use of digital platform is the reduce of storage space that big amount of paper would require. The lecturer challenges this idea explaining that usually doctors keep paper records of all their activities, as backup in case they were needed like legal requirements. Consequently, there is no big difference in saving space of storage by using electronical records.

Secondly, the reading passage states that the medical errors would be eliminated or reduced considerably by using the electronic records over the papers one. On the contrary, the lecture explains how doctors continues writing their prescription and reports by hand. Moreover, the data introduced in the electronical report is done by hand and by reading those report written, also by hand, by the doctors. Thus, the possibility of errors by mispelling or wrong typewriting still high in electronic records.

Finally, the reading passages argues that the electronic records help medical research by gathering large amount of information at a time. On the contrary, the lecturer exposes the law that protect the individual privacy, in the United States that difficult the access to information. As a result, with such reasoning the reading passage's last argument is contradicted.

In summary, both, the reading passage and the lecture discuss the same topic, but with opposite points of view. While the reading passage states the benefits of using medical electronic records, the lecture effectively challenges all the claims made by the reading passages.

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Average: 8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 100, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...nefit of the use of digital platform is the reduce of storage space that big amount of pap...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, while, in summary, as a result, first of all, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1373.03311258 125% => OK
No of words: 316.0 270.72406181 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44936708861 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81595785673 2.5805825403 109% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525316455696 0.540411800872 97% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 419.366225166 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 3.25607064018 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.23620309051 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.2690045939 49.2860985944 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0666666667 21.698381199 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6666666667 7.06452816374 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304891662379 0.272083759551 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11866028276 0.0996497079465 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107513125272 0.0662205650399 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191233583946 0.162205337803 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610874959322 0.0443174109184 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 53.8541721854 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.0289183223 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 63.6247240618 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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