TPO-46 - Integrated Writing Task In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which informa

The reading asserts that using electronic medical report is more effective and more beneficial rather than paper forms. The lecture however finds the idea dubious and casts doubt on the reasons proposed by reading passage.
First, the author argues that using electronic records reduce the cost and also can easily access. Conversely the lecture brings up the idea that, this way does not have significant impact on cost reduction since doctors keep their papers with their signature for their backup information, so this way is not efficient.
Furthermore, the reading passage holds the view that using electronic records would remove human errors and reduce the chance of errors. On the contrary, the professor underline the fact that it would not eliminate possibilities of errors since they still use papers and take note by hand, and maybe at a late night they enter poor and wrong patient information into electronic forms.
Finally, it is stated in the reading passage that in this way researchers have easily access to these information and lead to development in research.In contrast, the speaker dismisses this issue due to the fact that the researchers would not access to patient information easily due to privacy laws. The researchers should obtain many permissions especially patients' permission, and they have to follow many rules so they can not access to these records easily.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
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Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ion and lead to development in research.In contrast, the speaker dismisses this is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, in contrast, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 5.04856512141 119% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 12.0772626932 58% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 22.412803532 98% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1175.0 1373.03311258 86% => OK
No of words: 224.0 270.72406181 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24553571429 5.08290768461 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59561649095 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 125.0 145.348785872 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558035714286 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 361.8 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 21.2450331126 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.7395825554 49.2860985944 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.875 110.228320801 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.0 7.06452816374 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.27373068433 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339127129381 0.272083759551 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.144069175636 0.0996497079465 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875099591234 0.0662205650399 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180487730584 0.162205337803 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402225483739 0.0443174109184 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.3589403974 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 53.8541721854 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.0289183223 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.2367328918 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.7273730684 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.498013245 126% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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