TPO 48 (integrated)_storing medical information

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TPO 48 (integrated)_storing medical information

The article states that storing medical information about patients in electronic database has several advantages over traditional record keeping and describes three of the advantages. However, the professor explains that the mentioned benefits in the article are uncertain and refutes each of the three benefits.
First, the reading states that electronic records can reduce costs by saving money on elimination of paper records. In contrary, the lecturer refutes this point by stating that the elimination of papers has not significant effect on costs. She explains that a lot of doctors don't throw out the paper records and keep them as a backup. Also the professor states that signature of doctors is needed for future demands.
Second, the article claims that electronic records can reduce the chance of medical errors. In contrast, the professor opposes this point by saying that most of the doctors still use papers and office staffs transfers the handwritings to electronic formats. So in this process the errors will remain.
Third, the reading passage holds the view that electronic database of patient's medical records can aid medical research. However, the professor casts doubt over this view and contends that electronic records would not provide benefits for researchers. She states that access to medical records is difficult because of strict privacy law in the United States and scientists have to get allowance from patients and follow the strict and limitation in this regard.
Overall, while the passage brings three benefits to support the use of electronic records of medical information, the lecture prefers to differ by providing counter arguments.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
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Line 2, column 335, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, still, third, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 10.4613686534 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 22.412803532 85% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.01324503311 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1373.03311258 103% => OK
No of words: 261.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42528735632 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62054401244 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 145.348785872 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513409961686 0.540411800872 95% => OK
syllable_count: 430.2 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3335928571 49.2860985944 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.923076923 110.228320801 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0769230769 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06452816374 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0482338801982 0.272083759551 18% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0189611432267 0.0996497079465 19% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0129767131192 0.0662205650399 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0291136887972 0.162205337803 18% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0133821978867 0.0443174109184 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.42419426049 104% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 63.6247240618 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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