TPO 49 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

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TPO-49 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends

Nowadays, among many issues and problems that mankind are struggling with it is crucial to have good friendships. some people hold an opinion that it is important to have ability to gain new friends, however, others think finding new friend is less important than keeping our relations with old friends. Personally, I believe in latter point of view because of two reason, both of which I will explain in bellow praghraphs.
First of all, we must describe friendship, what we want from this phenomenon? Is not it because we add a person as a new member into our family and trust him as we trust our brother and sister? we need a person who can we trust and who helps us to be more successful man. when we meet a person at the very first days we can not trust him in any aspect of our life, but after few months if we feel this person is good guy we trust him and after few year we can even establish a bussines with him since we know him very well. I have a great partner in my store, we met 10 years ago. After having several problems, we understand that this is good relationship and we started our little bussines and now not only we are great friend but also our family are in touch which is enjoyable for but of us. To sum up, in my point of view, we need a trustable friendship that gives us good feeling as we have about our family's mamber.
Secondly, we live in the rush era, so we must use our precious time in the best way. We can not waste our time for finding new friends every day, therefore, we must hold our previous relationships firmly and enhance it instead of seeking for new person in our life. There was a survay in my country regarding this matter. They studied on 2 groups, both of which tend to find new friend and keep their current relationships respectively. The results shown that the second group was properious persons in their life because they did not waste their time for finding new person, on the contrary, they focus on their existend friendships. So we can understand from aforementioned argument that searching for new firend is not reasonable action and it is better to stick into perivious ones.
To make long story short, according to previous reasons I strongly believe that we must keep our friend ship and try to improve it in many aspect but endeavoring for finding new friend is not very well ability because this kind of friend ship are both untrustable and wasting time. put your efford on keeping our perior relations with your friends.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
...it is crucial to have good friendships. some people hold an opinion that it is impor...
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Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...him as we trust our brother and sister? we need a person who can we trust and who ...
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Line 2, column 272, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: When
...who helps us to be more successful man. when we meet a person at the very first days...
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Line 2, column 444, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun year seems to be countable; consider using: 'few years'.
Suggestion: few years
...rson is good guy we trust him and after few year we can even establish a bussines with h...
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Line 4, column 135, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun aspect seems to be countable; consider using: 'many aspects'.
Suggestion: many aspects
...ur friend ship and try to improve it in many aspect but endeavoring for finding new friend ...
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Line 4, column 282, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Put
... are both untrustable and wasting time. put your efford on keeping our perior relat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, kind of, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.4613686534 163% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 5.04856512141 238% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 22.412803532 352% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 30.3222958057 175% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1373.03311258 148% => OK
No of words: 455.0 270.72406181 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.47032967033 5.08290768461 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45885450222 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 145.348785872 155% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494505494505 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 419.366225166 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.55342163355 84% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 3.25607064018 369% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 8.23620309051 12% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 13.0662251656 138% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9877700977 49.2860985944 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.0 110.228320801 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2777777778 21.698381199 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06452816374 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 4.19205298013 143% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 4.33554083885 369% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 4.45695364238 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143183695907 0.272083759551 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529288147325 0.0996497079465 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.027105264356 0.0662205650399 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0923454207384 0.162205337803 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254041653255 0.0443174109184 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 53.8541721854 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.2367328918 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.42419426049 89% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 63.6247240618 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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