competition among friends usualy has a negative effects on friendship,agree or disagree?
These days, we see competition among friends to get to the point that both of them are struggling for. There is a controversial question whether this race is helpful for their relationship or it can ruin the friendship? Personally I believe not only can it be benefitial, but also it is a crucial element for any friendship. I have two reasons for my point of view, both of which will be mentioned in the following essay.
To begin with, participating in any competition makes us work harder cause we have a goal to reach. We see such race between two friends, both of who are trying to be the best student at the university. Motivating them to put all they effort on a activity which will affect their future life, is a considerable reason that vindicates my viewpoint. I have a personal experience regarding this matter, which I think can illustrate the issue in a better way. when I was in a university, I had a friend, Hooman, who is my friend by now. Being in a competition in our courses, made us the two best students of the educational center, and forced us to work hard to achieve our objectives. These kind of races force us to step toward success, prosperious can be considered as a result of these competitions.
Secendly, individuals have numerious friends around them. having great time with them, they can not know about what is fellows' respons to a situation in which they have to be in opposite points. If we haw a competition about an aspects of our life, no matter educational field or economical, we will understand their personality in a better way. This congnition will help us to elliminate some of friends who have shown their real characterestic during a competition. My brother had a close friend. They used to be together all the time. Some day,when they saw theirselves in a race to reach a prominent position in a big company, his friend did what ever he can to convince the chief of the intitution to neglect my brother. Being in a hard situation like a competition can help us to know our friends, whether can we trust them as a brother or not.
To make a long story short, according to the aforementioned arguments, we need a reliable relationship which can help us to improve ourselves in many aspects of our life such as education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, i think, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61234567901 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94313944733 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.9067231638 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.15 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.098735741625 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0382764903025 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422229757697 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0619582946087 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411959974739 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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