TPO 49 - Integrated writing

Both the reading passage and the lecture discuss the possibility of the issue whether or not humpback whales navigate by stars. Albeit the author provides three reasons of support to advocate humpback whales' ability to navigate by stars, the lecturer challenges all the evidences and refutes them all.
First of all, the author points to humpback whales' high intelligence to support their ability to use a complicated system for orientation. However, the lecturer believes intelligence has nothing to do with navigation by stars and is irrelevent. For instance, dock, a bird of an average intelligence, is able to navigate by stars. Thus a complex brain does not necessarily associate with this ability. It is just an ability that some animals instinctively are born with.
Second, according to the author, as humpback whales migrate in straight lines they must orient themselves by an external force. Since humpback whales can not rely on land features, like birds to be oriented, it is stars at night helping them stay oriented. Yet, the lecturer disagrees, and points to the bio-magnet in humpback whales' brain helping them stay oriented by the earth's magnetic field.
Finally, the author mentions the strange behavior in humpback whales with heads above the water which seems like they are looking upward seeking for stars. Yet, the lecturer states the issue doesn't work, since some other animals such as sharks have the same behavior, but they are in search of prey. In addition, the author misses the point that humpback whales might demonstrate this behavior also in daylight when stars are not visible. In conclusion, reasons to support humpback whales ability to navigate by stars does not work, and even though is fascinating, is a pure speculation and nothing more.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...re discuss the possibility of the issue whether or not humpback whales navigate by stars. Albe...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 330, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...lligence, is able to navigate by stars. Thus a complex brain does not necessarily as...
^^^^
Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ars. Yet, the lecturer states the issue doesnt work, since some other animals such as ...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, look, second, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 12.0772626932 33% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 22.412803532 62% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 30.3222958057 139% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1373.03311258 109% => OK
No of words: 289.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1660899654 5.08290768461 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62965761965 2.5805825403 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543252595156 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6530941196 49.2860985944 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.642857143 110.228320801 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 21.698381199 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06452816374 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.468001019907 0.272083759551 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162282844737 0.0996497079465 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776079005919 0.0662205650399 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.285726067635 0.162205337803 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560382364154 0.0443174109184 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.3589403974 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 53.8541721854 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 63.6247240618 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.7273730684 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.2008830022 116% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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