TPO-49 - Integrated Writing Task Like many creatures, humpback whales migrate long distances for feeding and mating purposes. How animals manage to migrate long distances is often puzzling. In the case of humpback whales, we may have found the answer: the

The passage state that the humpback whale uses stars to aid for locomotion in search of feeding and mating. However, the lecture presents several opinions which cast doubt on the reading.
Firstly the reading state that, the humpback whales are very intelligent to depend on the stars for guidance. The passage claims that their brain are highly develop to enable them to use stars for orientation. The lecture is in contradiction with the passage. According to the saying of the professor, the fact of being intelligent doesn't have any connection with the ability to use stars. The lecture state that other animals still use stars for orientation but that it is just instinct. It has nothing to do with intelligence. The point made by the lecture cast doubt on the the reading because according to the lecture, intelligence has no connection with the act of using stars.
Also the passage claims that humpback whales move from place to place in straight line and that it is only possible to do this if they are directed by external objects. The reading argues that the whales can't rely on land features for orientation but instead of stars to provide external signs. This is completely different from the saying of the lecture which state that the whales are very sensitive to field. They depend on magnetic field for orientation. The difference in explanation made by the lecture cast doubt on the reading.
Finally the reading state that the whales are often seen floating on water with their head straight. According, to the reading apparently this movement of the whales is due to the fact that they depend on stars and keep watching them for migration. However the lecturer gives a different point of view to explain that. The professor state that these are just shocks and it is only speculation. So this point made by the lecture about speculation is in contradiction to the reading which state that the whales depend on stars.
In conclusion, according to the lecture, intelligence, moving on a straight line and floating on water with the head out of water has nothing to deal with the fact of using stars for locomotion. So for all the above reasons, the points made by the lecture cast doubt on the reading.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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The passage state that the humpback whal...
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...ions which cast doubt on the reading. Firstly the reading state that, the hump...
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...rofessor, the fact of being intelligent doesnt have any connection with the ability to...
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...point made by the lecture cast doubt on the the reading because according to the lectur...
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...point made by the lecture cast doubt on the the reading because according to the lectur...
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...onnection with the act of using stars. Also the passage claims that humpback wh...
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...n with the act of using stars. Also the passage claims that humpback whales...
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...he lecture cast doubt on the reading. Finally the reading state that the whale...
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...sor state that these are just shocks and it is only speculation. So this point ma...
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...state that the whales depend on stars. In conclusion, according to the lecture,...
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...the lecture cast doubt on the reading.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, so, still, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 30.3222958057 204% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 5.01324503311 379% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1373.03311258 134% => OK
No of words: 381.0 270.72406181 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84251968504 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.04702891845 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58256780171 2.5805825403 100% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.393700787402 0.540411800872 73% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 561.6 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5613705629 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.8571428571 110.228320801 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1428571429 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 7.06452816374 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 4.19205298013 358% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 4.45695364238 179% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337944074802 0.272083759551 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112711331326 0.0996497079465 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0758709089004 0.0662205650399 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213213609345 0.162205337803 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493748664304 0.0443174109184 111% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.3589403974 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.8541721854 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.0289183223 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.42419426049 84% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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