TPO-50 - Integrated Writing Task: Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth

The main idea of both the passage and the lecture is about possibility of traveling to Mars for mankind. In this line of thought, according to the passage, there are three possible difficulties which make round-trip to Mars impossible for human being, by disapproving them one by one, the professor states that although the trip to Mars is definitely challenging, some scientists, however, have suggested some solutions. Accordingly, the lecturer provides three plausible solutions for the mentioned argument episodes in the passage.
First, both the reading and the listening materials talk about providing needed supplies for astronauts in the prolonged trip to Mars. In this vein, the author posits that providing supplies of food, water and oxygen for a long period as long as two years is one of the hardships that astronauts are facing. On contrary, the speaker opposes this by introducing a solution namely hydroponic planting technique. To more clarification, she states that astronauts can use the new method to plant their required crops there at the spaceship which will demands relatively little space. Additionally, the plants produce oxygen in photosynthesis process which meets the needs of astronauts for fresh air. Also, recycling the waste water will prepare fresh water in the spaceship.
Second, both the text and the talk discuss the probable effects of zero-gravity on the spacemen. Having this in mind, the text asserts that spending an extended time in zero gravity state affects the people, adversely. While the speaker opposed the declaration by demonstrating that several spaceships have been lunched before and astronauts have experienced the zero-gravity many times. As a result, they have learned some techniques to overcome the side effects of the zero-gravity. Doing exercises, they improve their muscles and also taking vitamins enhances their bones density.
Eventually, both the passage and the lecture discuss the idea of solar radiance effects on the spacemen. The passage claims that being exposed to the space radiation can have harmful effects on the individual’s bodies. Conversely, the lecturer refutes the assertion by illustrating that sun radiation will not cause dangers for the astronauts. Clarifying it, the radiation is just occasionally and does not last for a long time. Consequently, if the spaceship was equipped with a monitoring system, detection of the time of radiation will be possible. Having a small shelter on the spaceship can prevent the people from exposing radiation as the time. They can stay safely there shielded until the radiation decreases.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, consequently, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, while, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1373.03311258 161% => OK
No of words: 408.0 270.72406181 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42647058824 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.04702891845 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93410506127 2.5805825403 114% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 145.348785872 154% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549019607843 0.540411800872 102% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 419.366225166 163% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 13.0662251656 161% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.064496144 49.2860985944 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.428571429 110.228320801 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52380952381 7.06452816374 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0911988433552 0.272083759551 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0252616208564 0.0996497079465 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0366827411181 0.0662205650399 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0573986675858 0.162205337803 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439922133368 0.0443174109184 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 53.8541721854 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.2367328918 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.42419426049 111% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 63.6247240618 193% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.7273730684 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.2008830022 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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