Tpo25- integrated writing

According to many archaeologists, due to the specific configuration of a device excavated in Iraq in 1938, which consists of a copper cylinder surrounding an Iron rod, it could possibly have been used as a battery in the ancient time. Although the author is casting doubt on the proposed application of this device, the professor believes that the reasons argued in the passage are not persuasive enough, and the device could be an ancient battery. The professor's reasons to justify his claims are as follows.

Firstly, the author states that since no kind of conductors or wires has been detected near the excavated object, it is very unlikely that this device had been used as a battery for electricity generation. The professor, however, opposes this statement by referring to the fact that this device had actually been found by local people rather than trained archaeologists. Therefore, it is possible that people had found wires, but since they did not know its application or importance, they might have missed it or even threw it away.

Secondly, the passage claims that such copper cylindrical devices have been found in the other archeological sites, such Selecuia in Syria. According to the author, it has been proved that these cylindrical vessels had been utilized for holding scrolls of religious texts. Although the professor acknowledges this fact, he disagrees that the detected object in Iraq had the same function. He suggests that it is very likely that people had found another possible application besides the primary function of the vessel. Thus, it is possible that this device had served as an ancient battery.

Finally, the author believes that electricity had no usage in the ancient life. However, the professor repudiates this idea as well. He believes that the battery could have been used as a source of power to convince people that the owner of it has special supernatural powers by, for example making a mild shock. Besides that, he suggests that such mild shocks could have had therapeutic applications for reducing muscle cramps or even relieving pain in patients.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...er cylinder surrounding an Iron rod, it could possibly have been used as a battery in the anci...
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Line 1, column 465, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'reason'.
Suggestion: reason
...d be an ancient battery. The professors reasons to justify his claims are as follows. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vice had served as an ancient battery. Finally, the author believes that electr...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.4613686534 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 22.412803532 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 30.3222958057 106% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1373.03311258 129% => OK
No of words: 345.0 270.72406181 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11884057971 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74657220826 2.5805825403 106% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492753623188 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 552.6 419.366225166 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 3.25607064018 307% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.4615664687 49.2860985944 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.733333333 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46666666667 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.27373068433 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304222265189 0.272083759551 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103258637124 0.0996497079465 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635104504786 0.0662205650399 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190578949263 0.162205337803 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281544453545 0.0443174109184 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.8541721854 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.2367328918 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 63.6247240618 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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