TPO30 integrated writing

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TPO30 integrated writing

The reading claims the greek an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror is only a myth and never built. The author elaborates his viewpoints by providing three main reasons. Nevertheless, the professor believes that it may be bulit and was practical; so, refutes each of the author's stand-points.

First, the reading avers that the ancient greek didn't have such a advanced technology becuase it needs a very precise parabolic curvature for manufacturing copper sheets. However, the professor refutes this concept by stating that they didn't need single copper to manufacturing the weapon, and could be some pieces of mirors in order to parabolic th ships.

Furthermore, the article asserts that the weapon required a very long time about 10 minute and ships didn't move to weapon become practical and effective for woody ships. On the other hand, the lecturer brings up the fact that not all parts of the ship made from wood and indicates to the sticky part which called pitche which is easily set on fire in seconds. In addition, she states that it could be impacted even on the moving ships.

Finally, the article posits that same technology like flaming arrows which set ships on fire from exact distance and power; hence, the didn't need extra technology. Contrary, the lecturer casts doubt on this claim by stating that enemies were familar with flaming arrows and saw the arrows and put them off gradually. Also, she states that the burning mirror technology would unobserving and set the ships on fire at seconds whithout knowing it was coming and could increase fears on enemies perfectly.

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Average: 9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 49, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...he reading avers that the ancient greek didnt have such a advanced technology becuase...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... that the ancient greek didnt have such a advanced technology becuase it needs a ...
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Line 3, column 237, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...futes this concept by stating that they didnt need single copper to manufacturing the...
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Line 5, column 102, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ery long time about 10 minute and ships didnt move to weapon become practical and eff...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...om exact distance and power; hence, the didnt need extra technology. Contrary, the le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, may, nevertheless, second, so, in addition, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.4613686534 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 1373.03311258 97% => OK
No of words: 266.0 270.72406181 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02255639098 5.08290768461 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.04702891845 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49282139685 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 145.348785872 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59022556391 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 419.366225166 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 21.2450331126 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1055344706 49.2860985944 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.454545455 110.228320801 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1818181818 21.698381199 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1818181818 7.06452816374 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 4.19205298013 119% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347648959423 0.272083759551 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113443318993 0.0996497079465 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0900212572141 0.0662205650399 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178406021534 0.162205337803 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444294669195 0.0443174109184 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 53.8541721854 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 63.6247240618 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.498013245 110% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 90 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27 Out of 30
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