tpo40-Q1-rewrite

Essay topics: tpo40-Q1-rewrite

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The article states that maintaining a human presence on the Venus is not possible due to its inhospitable conditions and provides three reasons to support. However the professor says that maintain a permanent presence on Venus is certainly possible and the problems can be solved, he refutes each of the author's reason.

First, the reading claims that atmospheric pressure at Venus surface is too greater than the pressure at Earth's surface and cause some problems. However, the professor contends that due to 50km height of Venus this pressure is normal equal to the pressures at Earth surface. So there is no danger to crash for spacecraft landed on Venus.

Second, the reading passage posits that there are no water reservoirs on Venus' surface and it is required to supply water to Venus from earth. The professor opposes this point by explaining that Venus contains compound such as carbon dioxide, sulfuric acid and so forth. So chemical process can make water and it is not necessary to import water from earth.

Third, the article says that because of thick clouds that surround the Venus, very little sunlight reaches the planet's surface. The professor refutes this point by saying that the above clouds that fill the Venus atmosphere are not very thick and moreover humans can use both direct and reflected sunlight to generate electricity to power their machines and equipment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... and provides three reasons to support. However the professor says that maintain a perm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, moreover, second, so, third, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 22.412803532 80% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1168.0 1373.03311258 85% => OK
No of words: 229.0 270.72406181 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10043668122 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.04702891845 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46589985145 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558951965066 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 354.6 419.366225166 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 13.0662251656 77% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9115797985 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.8 110.228320801 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9 21.698381199 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06452816374 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 4.33554083885 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462644578623 0.272083759551 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18333906162 0.0996497079465 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424793416329 0.0662205650399 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25934535469 0.162205337803 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471267226671 0.0443174109184 106% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.3589403974 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 53.8541721854 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.2367328918 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 63.6247240618 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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