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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain.

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The purpose of television is to educate, not to entertain.

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Nowadays, television is an elementary device you can find it in every house. Some people believe that the purpose of television is to educate. While, others believe that the purpose of television is just for entertainment and filling their spare times. Personally, I think not only, people can use television as an entertaining tool and pursue their own interest programs for fun, but also they can learn many thing from T.V. Actually, I think television support both entertainment and educational programs.
Let's look at the question from an entertainment standpoint, all people sometimes watch television just for release their stress and do relax. For instance, nobody like watching an educational show after hard working during a day, they like to watch some programs which do not challenge their mind and help them to spend their times with their families and have fun without putting a lot of energy. Comedic movies, talent shows, sport competitions and so forth, are kind of programs that are produced just for entertainment and have no educational aspects.
On the other hand, T.V can be a great teaching tool and some programs are produced to teach and educate people. For example, scientific programs are produced to expand people's information, or some cooking programs which take viewers a set of instruction to cook foods. Though, these kind of programs could be interested for people, but the main object of them is to instruct and educate people about a specific topic. The same can be true about health programs and some historic shows on BBC channel.
Finally, for improving the quality of television's shows, producers consider both of educational and entertainment aspects in some programs. It is really helpful especially for children. Children almost don't like serious and dry shows, but with making educational cartoons and movies, producers can increase children's incentive to watch educational programs with more enthusiasm. Accordingly television could act as both entertainment and learning tool.
To make a long story short, television has a pivotal role in both entertaining and educating people. All aforementioned reasons are point to my idea.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 407, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
...ograms for fun, but also they can learn many thing from T.V. Actually, I think television...
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Line 1, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...also they can learn many thing from T.V. Actually, I think television support bot...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...ntertainment and educational programs. Lets look at the question from an entertainm...
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Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: V
...ational aspects. On the other hand, T.V can be a great teaching tool and some p...
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Line 3, column 278, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...t of instruction to cook foods. Though, these kind of programs could be interested for peo...
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Line 4, column 202, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...specially for children. Children almost dont like serious and dry shows, but with ma...
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Line 4, column 379, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Accordingly,
...cational programs with more enthusiasm. Accordingly television could act as both entertainm...
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Line 4, column 447, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to tool'
Suggestion: to tool
... act as both entertainment and learning tool. To make a long story short, televis...
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Line 4, column 453, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s both entertainment and learning tool. To make a long story short, television h...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, but, finally, if, look, really, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28901734104 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88384857071 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552023121387 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9165081318 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.647058824 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3529411765 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170498529274 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685972843745 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652577721537 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103580149969 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721455593165 0.0645574589148 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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