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The reading states that many skeptics doubt that bees existed on earth 200 million years ago and also they believe that the discovery resemble bee nest structures were not created by bees and provide three reasons. However, the professor states that it is perfectly possible that the structure are made by bees and refutes each author's arguments.
First, the argument which mention in the reading claims that no fossil remains of actual bees have ever been found 200 million years ago. However the professor contends that preserving in trees resin were common much later. He explains that it is possible that bees existed before but no tree resin existed, so it took the chance to preserve bees as fossils.
Second, the argument in passage is that due to absence of flowering plants 200 million years ago, so it may bees didn't exist in that time. The professor refutes this point by saying that it is possible bees feed on non-flowering plants before, and may after flowering plant evolves, bees use them as their food.
Third, the reading states that the lack of spiral patterns in fossilized structures are found so it may made by other insects. While, the professor opposes this point by explaining that there are some kind of water proofing materials in the structures which are made just by bees for water proofing, therefore those structures possibly made by bees no other insects

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 138, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
... ever been found 200 million years ago. However the professor contends that preserving ...
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Line 3, column 114, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...s 200 million years ago, so it may bees didnt exist in that time. The professor refut...
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Line 4, column 201, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
...point by explaining that there are some kind of water proofing materials in the stru...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, second, so, therefore, third, while, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 7.30242825607 68% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 22.412803532 120% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 30.3222958057 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1157.0 1373.03311258 84% => OK
No of words: 235.0 270.72406181 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92340425532 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91531732006 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33850598265 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 145.348785872 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544680851064 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 344.7 419.366225166 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.7034121933 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.555555556 110.228320801 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1111111111 21.698381199 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.44444444444 7.06452816374 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0675852149092 0.272083759551 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318387480902 0.0996497079465 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0192839837496 0.0662205650399 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459602524214 0.162205337803 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00841296564927 0.0443174109184 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.2367328918 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.42419426049 101% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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