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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents do not understand their children as much as well as did 50 years ago.

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents do not understand their children as much as well as did 50 years ago.

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To developing children behavior and avoid them from some mental disease family should understand their children and do not expect them behave, think and work beyond their ability and potential. Some people believe that today, technology make an abstract barrier between children and their parents and lead to parents can't understand their children as much as well as did in the past. While, others think that nowadays parents are more aware about their children behavior and understand them more than before. Personally, I agree with the latter idea, I thinks not only technology and developments in other fields do not act as obstacles but also they help parents to enhance their attitudes about their children. Furthermore, parents spend more time with their children, so I believe in recent decades parents understand their kids better than past 50 years. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to support my point of view.
In the past, people thought that the only necessities for children are their feed and clothing. However, clothing and feed are the basic requisites for children and children need attention and support from their families as well. These days, the psychology science is developed. Many researchers do various research about children behavior and what they need, these researches are shown that children need attention and love from their family more than basic necessities, and aware parents about this issue. Nowadays there are many papers and books available for parents to read and also the parents themselves are more literate and educated than before, so all these things led to increase the parents understanding about their children.
In the past, people, especially fathers, worked out for a long time in a day to provide the basic necessities for their family, they even sometimes were not be at home for months, they didn't spend time with their children, so they couldn't understand their children as much as should, and children were deprived of their families attention and often felt frustrated. But in the recent decades, family always allocate some of their time to spend with their children, for example, they speak with their children, play with them, and attend in their schools for their educational party and so forth, therefore it provides them opportunity to understand their children more than before.
To make a long story short, I think, in this era, parents spend more time with their children and are more aware about what their children need, so they understand their children more than before. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...n and their parents and lead to parents cant understand their children as much as we...
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Line 1, column 554, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...onally, I agree with the latter idea, I thinks not only technology and developments in...
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Line 2, column 453, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...on and love from their family more than basic necessities, and aware parents about this issue. No...
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Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...for a long time in a day to provide the basic necessities for their family, they even sometimes w...
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Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...ir family, they even sometimes were not be at home for months, they didnt spend ti...
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Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...es were not be at home for months, they didnt spend time with their children, so they...
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Line 3, column 232, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...spend time with their children, so they couldnt understand their children as much as sh...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rated. But in the recent decades, family always allocate some of their time to sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, so, therefore, well, while, even so, for example, i think, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2202.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16901408451 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49712744665 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443661971831 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 87.3975336545 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.8 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330318243658 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135088098453 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0788247818155 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229030608576 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0785480626154 0.0645574589148 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 11.7677419355 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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