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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents do not understand their children as much as well as did 50 years ago. (rewrite)

Essay topics: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents do not understand their children as much as well as did 50 years ago. (rewrite)

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To developing children behavior and prevent some mental disease family should understand their children and do not expect them behave, think, and work beyond their ability and potential. Some people believe that today, technology makes an abstract barrier between children and their parents and lead to a lack of understanding of their children. While, others think that nowadays parents are more aware about their children behavior and understand them more than before. Personally, I agree with the latter idea, I think not only technology and developments in other fields do not act as obstacles but also they help parents to enhance their knowledge about their children. Furthermore, parents spend more time with their children, so I believe in recent decades parents understand their kids better than the past 50 years. In what follows I will cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to support my point of view.
In the past, people thought that the only necessities for children are their food and clothing. However, clothing and food are the basic requisites for children and children need attention and support from their families as well. These days, the psychology science is developed. Many researchers do various research about children behavior and what they need, these researches are shown that children need attention and love from their family more than fundamental food and clothing necessities, and this makes parents aware of such issues. Nowadays there are many papers and books available for parents to read and also the parents themselves are more literate and educated than before, so all these things led to increase the parents understanding about their children.
In the past, people, especially fathers, worked out for a long time in a day to provide the basic necessities for their family, they even sometimes were not at home for months, they didn't spend time with their children, so they couldn't understand their children as much as they should, and children were deprived of their families attention and often felt frustrated. But in the recent decades, family always allocate some of their time to spend with their children, for example, they speak with their children, play with them, and attend in their schools for their graduation ceremonies and so forth, therefore it provides them opportunity to understand their children more than before.
To make a long story short, I think, in this era, parents spend more time with their children, thanks to development and technology. And they are more aware about what their children need, so they understand their children more than before. All aforementioned reasons point to my idea

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 93, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...for a long time in a day to provide the basic necessities for their family, they even sometimes w...
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Line 3, column 183, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...times were not at home for months, they didnt spend time with their children, so they...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...spend time with their children, so they couldnt understand their children as much as th...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rated. But in the recent decades, family always allocate some of their time to sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, so, therefore, well, while, even so, for example, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23076923077 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57513625178 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44289044289 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 88.6111590038 48.9658058833 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.25 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8125 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.625 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298136927925 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122366915111 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0662380066059 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207401874159 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0601219077746 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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