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In this set of material, the reading states that glass of building can harm to birds because they cannot distinguish between glass and open air, so the reading brings up three solutions for preventing from this occurrence, however the lecture finds all solutions dubious and provides some evidence to advocate that these approaches are not effective. The information the professor provides contradicts the in fact outlined in the reading passage.
First, the reading claims that way glass is a type glass which is transparent in only one direction, so engineers can use it instead of regular ordinary glass. With this glass, the birds will not be able to see inside; consequently they understand that there is a barrier for their flying. In contrast the lecture contends that these types of glasses can reflect the image of sky. In fact they act as a mirror and since the birds do not discern the mirror too; hence this glass can be dangerous for them.
Second, the reading passage declares that colorful design can be another useful method. A thin strip painted will be created on window and it can help birds not to fly toward the window. On the contrary, the professor argues that other parts of window are without paint, consequently the birds again fly toward these parts and they hit and even if whole of the window is being painted, it will be a big problem for occupants.
Third, the reading declares that using magnetic field is a great solution for birds. This magnetic field works as a compass for them; conversely the professor believes that magnetic field works in long distant for birds like the places out of city and in the winter for finding food or direction. In short distance like a city, this approach will not be appropriate.
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Essay evaluation report
The information the professor provides contradicts the in fact outlined in the reading passage.
The information the professor provides contradicts the fact outlined in the reading passage.
flaws:
No. of Words: 301 250
Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 24 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 12
No. of Words: 301 250
No. of Characters: 1417 1200
No. of Different Words: 158 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.2
Average Word Length: 4.708 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.391 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 44 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.083 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.238 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.602 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: contrast,
...there is a barrier for their flying. In contrast the lecture contends that these types o...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'conversely', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'third', 'in contrast', 'in fact', 'in short', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258358662614 0.261695866417 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.142857142857 0.158904122519 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.063829787234 0.0723426182421 88% => OK
Adverbs: 0.048632218845 0.0435111971325 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0303951367781 0.0277247811725 110% => OK
Prepositions: 0.155015197568 0.128828473217 120% => OK
Participles: 0.0243161094225 0.0370669169778 66% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.46344562851 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0121580547112 0.0208969081088 58% => OK
Particles: 0.00303951367781 0.00154638098197 197% => OK
Determiners: 0.130699088146 0.128158765124 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0334346504559 0.0158828679856 211% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00607902735562 0.0114777025283 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1755.0 1645.83664459 107% => OK
No of words: 301.0 271.125827815 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.83056478405 6.08160592843 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.04852973271 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.332225913621 0.374372842146 89% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.259136212625 0.287516216867 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.152823920266 0.187439937562 82% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0830564784053 0.113142543107 73% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46344562851 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 145.348785872 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538205980066 0.539623497131 100% => OK
Word variations: 55.3798147768 53.8517498576 103% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0529801325 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0833333333 21.7502111507 115% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.7176876372 49.3711431718 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.25 132.220823453 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0833333333 21.7502111507 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.08333333333 0.878197800319 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.39072847682 29% => OK
Readability: 50.9969545958 50.5018328374 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.97260273973 1.90840788429 103% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.652924387741 0.549887131256 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.151965673647 0.142949733639 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.106072978143 0.0787303798458 135% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.615566081218 0.631733273073 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.168388286246 0.139662658121 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.286077519015 0.266732575781 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0980221537274 0.103435571967 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.362689344785 0.414875509568 87% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0900983335818 0.0530846634433 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.447177134229 0.40443939384 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734276963055 0.0528353158467 139% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.26048565121 47% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.49668874172 114% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.62251655629 138% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.1766004415 63% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 10.2958057395 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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