TPO46-Integrated-In the United States, medical information about patients traditionally has been recorded and stored on paper forms. However, there are efforts to persuade doctors to adopt electronic medical record systems in which information about patients is stored in electronic databases rather than on paper. It is argued that storing patients' medical records in electronic databases has several advantages over traditional paper-based record keeping.
First, the use of electronic records can help reduce costs by saving money on storing and transferring medical records. While paper records require a significant amount of storage space, electronic medical records take up virtually no space. Moreover, by having patients' records computerized in databases, doctors can easily access the records from almost anywhere and can easily duplicate and transfer them when necessary. This costs much less than copying, faxing, or transporting paper records from one location to another.
Second, electronic medical records are crucial to reducing the chances of medical errors. Illegible handwriting, improper transcription of data, and nonstandard organization of paper records have caused errors that in some cases have had serious consequences for the patients' health. In contrast, electronic records are associated with standardization of forms and legible computer fonts and thus minimize the possibility of human error.
Third, electronic medical records can greatly aid medical research by making it possible to gather large amounts of data from patient records. It is often impractical, impossible, or prohibitively expensive to manually go through thousands of patients’ paper records housed in doctors' offices. However, with the existence of electronic medical records, it would be simple to draw out the needed information from the medical databases because the databases are already formatted for data collection. Once in the electronic system, the records could be accessed from any research location.
Both the reading and the lecture discus the advantages of online recording the medical information by doctors. The author is of the opinion that online data collecting in medical centers such as doctor’s office have many benefits and provides three reasons for support. On the other hand, the lecturer states that these reasons are unconvincing by refuting each reason.
First, the reading claims that by online recording, cost of storing data will be decrease and doctors don’t need space to store medical data because they will be on virtual space on internet. However, the speaker says medical information online recording is unlikely to be significant as reading claims. She states that while some doctors record their medical data on computer, they still save a written copy as emergency backup. As a result they have to pay store cost still. So the online records did not seem cost effective.
Second, the author states that online saving medical reduces mistakes that occur because of human handwriting. Conversely, the lecturer contends that tis cannot decrease the possibility of handwriting errors owing to the fact that doctors take note and prescriptions for their patients by hand and medical assistants will transform it on computer later. Medical staff may be interrupted by doctor’s handwritings and make errors.
Third, the article mentions that online collecting data provide a chance for easy access to patient’s medical data and Medical researchers can benefit from it to do their researches and develop their medical information. On the contrary, the professor asserts that this is still find different for researchers to access to medical data because patient’s data is subjected to privacy policy of United States and patients have the right to do not allow access to their personal medical data. As a result, having access to this data still be a complicated process and need many permissions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 436, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ave a written copy as emergency backup. As a result they have to pay store cost st...
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Line 7, column 285, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'found'.
Suggestion: found
...he professor asserts that this is still find different for researchers to access to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
conversely, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, third, while, such as, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 5.01324503311 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 308.0 270.72406181 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.34415584416 5.08290768461 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.04702891845 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79872389782 2.5805825403 108% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 145.348785872 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512987012987 0.540411800872 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 515.7 419.366225166 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.636427527 49.2860985944 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.571428571 110.228320801 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 21.698381199 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06452816374 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364499320351 0.272083759551 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.138686183223 0.0996497079465 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656129729862 0.0662205650399 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220142037554 0.162205337803 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0562038094999 0.0443174109184 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.3589403974 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 53.8541721854 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.0289183223 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.2367328918 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.42419426049 105% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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