TPO54
The reading text and lecture are both about the several way to reduce the salinity of the Salton sea lake. While the author feel that by this way we can save the birds population. Lecturer is also agree with the author's point but claim that all these ideas are unrealistic.
First of all, according to the reading text, we should use the Desalination technology to reduce salt concentration. It is also mention that, By this technique we can pumped out the water, then heat this water and pumped back the cooled steam into the lake. On the other hand, lecturer said that, this technique will left over the soil material in water, that is health hazards for the people. Additionally, He mentions that, element like Celenium will cause serious problem in people breathing.
Secondly, reading passage suggests that, another way is to drain in the less salty water from near by the ocean, by constructing a canal or pipeline. He states that, water in nearby beaches is 20 percent less salty than the water in lake. However, professor goes on to says that, Local government does not having a enough resources and funding to pay for building this canal. On top of that, he point out that, nearby shore from the Salton sea lake is 1000 kilometer away,
Lastly, author believe that, we should break down the large area of lake into the small section. As a result of that, only small portion of that lake will getting higher and higher salty. In contrast to the reading passage, tutor notes down that this solution to reduce the salt concentration lower down is not a long lasting. He evidence that, this area is geologically active zone and people can face periodic earthquack in this area. So, well construct wall will fall off in short duration of time. Eventually, the water from all small section will backed in the salinity will become high.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun way seems to be countable; consider using: 'several ways'.
Suggestion: several ways
...ing text and lecture are both about the several way to reduce the salinity of the Salton se...
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Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ce the salinity of the Salton sea lake. While the author feel that by this way we can...
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Line 1, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...r feel that by this way we can save the birds population. Lecturer is also agree with...
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Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
... the birds population. Lecturer is also agree with the authors point but claim that a...
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Line 3, column 129, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'mentioned'.
Suggestion: mentioned
...o reduce salt concentration. It is also mention that, By this technique we can pumped o...
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Line 3, column 168, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'pump'
Suggestion: pump
... mention that, By this technique we can pumped out the water, then heat this water and...
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Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'leave'
Suggestion: leave
...lecturer said that, this technique will left over the soil material in water, that i...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
...s to drain in the less salty water from near by the ocean, by constructing a canal or p...
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Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...to says that, Local government does not having a enough resources and funding to pay f...
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Line 5, column 314, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... that, Local government does not having a enough resources and funding to pay for...
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Line 5, column 396, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'points'.
Suggestion: points
...building this canal. On top of that, he point out that, nearby shore from the Salton ...
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Line 5, column 458, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
... shore from the Salton sea lake is 1000 kilometer away, Lastly, author believe that, w...
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Line 7, column 156, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'get'
Suggestion: get
...t, only small portion of that lake will getting higher and higher salty. In contrast to...
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Line 7, column 331, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'He' must be used with a third-person verb: 'evidences'.
Suggestion: evidences
...on lower down is not a long lasting. He evidence that, this area is geologically active ...
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Line 7, column 553, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'back'
Suggestion: back
..., the water from all small section will backed in the salinity will become high.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in contrast, in short, as a result, first of all, in contrast to, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 5.04856512141 218% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 30.3222958057 152% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1527.0 1373.03311258 111% => OK
No of words: 321.0 270.72406181 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75700934579 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35796942261 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 145.348785872 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554517133956 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 3.25607064018 307% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.23620309051 24% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 2.5761589404 233% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.5201259799 49.2860985944 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4375 110.228320801 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 21.698381199 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9375 7.06452816374 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 4.19205298013 358% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.27373068433 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297936167683 0.272083759551 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102029013245 0.0996497079465 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887500034177 0.0662205650399 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185660526526 0.162205337803 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044933440589 0.0443174109184 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.2367328918 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 63.6247240618 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.7273730684 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 20 minutes.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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