The world’s forests are facing increasing pressure which, if left unchecked, will threaten the health of many industries, economies, nations, and lives. The development of an international fund to help developing countries implement useful conservation

Both passage and the lecture are concerning whether development of an international fund will be supportive in terms of conservation of the forests and so on. Albeit author strongly emphasizes 3 prime reasons why enhancement of such fund would be beneficial, lecturer utterly refutes that arguments by claiming some counterarguments.
Firstly, from author's perspective, fund will allocate money to the farms, and thus, agriculture will be automatically fostered, and author's asserts that improvement of agriculture will engender more effective preservation of forests, which is exceedingly crucial for humans health. However, lecturer rebuts this statements by accentuating that indeed agriculture is overly harmful in terms of protecting forests, for agriculture entails fertilizers, which will lead to run-offs and pollution.
Secondly, from author's point of view, funds will distribute money among farmers, and consequently, it will encourage cultivators to do their best so as to preserve forests. That being said, lecturer opposes this argument by underlining the point that money allocated by the funds will not go directly to the farmers, so they may not ascertain that the farmers will be motivated. In addition to this, from lecturer's point of view, in fact, even if we deem that farmers will receive money, farmers might utilize this money in order to uphold only their own financial needs, instead of taking care of forests.
Thirdly, author mentions importance of the biodiversity and if funds will help to maintain precious forests, humankind will probably encounter limited number of problems, not to mention they will acquire reliability on their food needs and etc. However, author rebuts this opinion by approving the opinion of miss uses of this money, since it could be also expended for purchasing harmful fertilizers and other materials.

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Average: 8.1 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, as to, in addition, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 5.04856512141 337% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 30.3222958057 135% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.01324503311 199% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1373.03311258 115% => OK
No of words: 285.0 270.72406181 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53333333333 5.08290768461 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99309557385 2.5805825403 116% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585964912281 0.540411800872 108% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.51434878587 198% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 21.2450331126 146% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.9824520887 49.2860985944 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.222222222 110.228320801 159% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.6666666667 21.698381199 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.4444444444 7.06452816374 204% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.27373068433 23% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140787189027 0.272083759551 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697993207747 0.0996497079465 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615060654796 0.0662205650399 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942551763102 0.162205337803 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034276862646 0.0443174109184 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.5 13.3589403974 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 53.8541721854 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 5.55761589404 202% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.0289183223 151% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.2367328918 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.22 8.42419426049 121% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 63.6247240618 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 10.7273730684 154% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.498013245 137% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.2008830022 152% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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