Zoos
Some critics contend that keeping animals in zoos is inhumane and must be changed. They believe that zoos are unnatural and provide no real benefit to society besides providing entertainment at the expense of the animals involved. The truth is that zoos are essential to a modern culture that places value in animal life.
Animals are treated well in zoos. In fact, the most passionate animal lovers are usually the animal keepers found in zoos. They ensure that the animals maintain the same level of psychological “happiness” as their wild counterparts. They, along with the zoo itself, help animals live longer, feed better, and suffer from fewer diseases; These animals are allowed to exist without the fear of predation or famine because of zoos.
Additionally, zoos are no longer seen as or marketed as forms of entertainment, but as education. Zoos work to inform the public about exhibited animals, wildlife in general, and the important need to preserve our Earth. The emphasis on conservation and education is an important one. Visitors are taught about issues and animals that they would never have direct experience with otherwise. Thus, zoos provide a crucial tool to direct the public towards more humane ways to look at the world.
Finally, zoos serve the vital function of helping to protect and preserve endangered species. For example, the Golden Lion Tamarins are an endangered species native to Brazil. In the early part of the 1970s, only around 200 of these small monkeys existed. It was only through the coordinated actions of several zoos and the Brazilian government that these animals were saved from extinction. Today, as a result of these efforts, you can find about 1,500 living in the wild.
The article states that zoos are essential and provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that activists don’t believe that zoos benefit animals or society and refutes each of the author's reasons.
First, the reading states that animals are treated well in zoos. The professor refutes this point. He states that animals are not treated well. He explains that in a zoo, two red pandas died from exposure to rat poison. Zoo safety managers could have prevented this, but were not present. The professor explains that this proves that zoo administrators show a lack of care towards animals.
Second, the article claims that zoos are educational. However, the professor says that zoos are still seen as entertainment. The animals in zoos attract visitors. They aren’t the animals that the public should really learn about. Zoos send the message that animals can be used for our own purposes. He states that though some zoos attempt to inform, we can’t understand them in zoos because they are in artificial and misleading exhibits.
Third, the reading claims that zoos protect endangered species. The professor says that this claim is problematic. He explains that the Taamarin is one successful example but that overall, zoos have a poor success rate. Zoos possess a small number of an endangered species so they tend to interbreed, which results in birth defects. Also, he states that zoos offer no advantage to saving animals in their native habitat.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, third, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 22.412803532 152% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 17.0 30.3222958057 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1269.0 1373.03311258 92% => OK
No of words: 241.0 270.72406181 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26556016598 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94007293032 4.04702891845 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55183685844 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576763485477 0.540411800872 107% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 419.366225166 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 3.25607064018 215% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 13.0662251656 145% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 21.2450331126 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7700793618 49.2860985944 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.7894736842 110.228320801 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 12.6842105263 21.698381199 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 3.63157894737 7.06452816374 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269971239009 0.272083759551 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899453252038 0.0996497079465 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0545978856501 0.0662205650399 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182107477722 0.162205337803 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548281387037 0.0443174109184 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 13.3589403974 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.76 53.8541721854 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.0289183223 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.4 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.42419426049 96% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.498013245 65% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 11.2008830022 62% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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