Effective learning requires time, comfort and peace so it is impossible to combine study and employment. Study and employment distract one from another. To what extent do you think the statements are realistic? Support your opinion with examples?
Recently, the phenomenon of being impossible to studying and working simultaneously and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that the matter of financial security is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that concentrating on learning without the stress of the job can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
Many students think working during study time have some noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that the merits of being able to handle universities fees, as well as provide their requirements, are remarkable. Moreover, beneficial ramifications of both creating an impressing resume and being responsible as a worker apparently can be seen. As an example, The New York Times reported that 60% of students in the USA have a part-time job and they are satisfied due to their independence and work experience.
However, I believe that deep learning is a time-consuming process and need solace, so juggling school and work might increase the consequences of jeopardizing perfect attendance. Furthermore, it could relate to this reality that the demerits of shallow learning pertain to insufficient time for studying and sleeping. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I have worked as a cashier in night shift. But in the mornings, I have felt exhausted and I could not focus on classes. So finally, I had to leave my job.
To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the benefits of allocating full time to study with a free mind far outweigh its drawbacks. Not only do the advantages of good results prove the significance of concentration, but also pinpoint maximizing study time implications.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to pertain'
Suggestion: to pertain
...y that the demerits of shallow learning pertain to insufficient time for studying and s...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...believe that the benefits of allocating full time to study with a free mind far outweigh ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 20.9802955665 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1207.87684729 130% => OK
No of words: 300.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22064693294 2.71678728327 119% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 139.433497537 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 379.143842365 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.931034482759 322% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6483668545 50.4703680194 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.692307692 104.977214359 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.9669160288 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 7.25397266985 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146487042403 0.242375264174 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487338869074 0.0925447433944 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405053393528 0.071462118173 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868324748442 0.151781067708 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271019137177 0.0609392437508 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 12.6369458128 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.1260098522 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 11.5310837438 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.32886699507 119% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 55.0591133005 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to pertain'
Suggestion: to pertain
...y that the demerits of shallow learning pertain to insufficient time for studying and s...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...believe that the benefits of allocating full time to study with a free mind far outweigh ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 8.36945812808 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 20.9802955665 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1207.87684729 130% => OK
No of words: 300.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23 5.00649968141 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22064693294 2.71678728327 119% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 139.433497537 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 379.143842365 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.931034482759 322% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6483668545 50.4703680194 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.692307692 104.977214359 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.9669160288 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 7.25397266985 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146487042403 0.242375264174 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0487338869074 0.0925447433944 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405053393528 0.071462118173 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0868324748442 0.151781067708 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271019137177 0.0609392437508 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 12.6369458128 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.1260098522 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 11.5310837438 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.32886699507 119% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 55.0591133005 178% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.