How widely do you think the problem spreads that people spend too much time on work than their personal life and experience time shortage? What problems it cause

The issue raises a debate about a problem that people spend a lot of time on their work and reduce their leisure time. The point of dispute calls for its analysis by various perspectives. However, it seems that it causes many negative effects.
There are a plethora of problems associated with this phenomenon. The most prominent is that people spend less time with their families and friends. Furthermore, another critical concern is that they can have problems with their health, for example, obesity, hypertension and depression. To cite an example on this matter, a study conducted by the University of Western Australia has shown that people spending too much time on their work have a 20% more chance of heart disease than people who work part time.
This problem can be solved according to the following rationale. Essentially, it is crucial to note, that employees should work part time or take a day off in the middle of the week. Moreover, this solution is well supported by the fact that they can pay much more attention to their children and friends. Hence, it apparent that there several impressive solutions.
Summing up all the point above, it can be concluded that there is no doubt that the harmful effects of working too much on their jobs are indeed too great to ignore.

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Average: 5.5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, hence, however, moreover, so, well, for example, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 5.94088669951 185% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 20.9802955665 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 31.9359605911 85% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 5.75862068966 35% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1074.0 1207.87684729 89% => OK
No of words: 221.0 242.827586207 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85972850679 5.00649968141 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53671470211 2.71678728327 93% => OK
Unique words: 129.0 139.433497537 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.58371040724 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 326.7 379.143842365 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.65517241379 27% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.5024630542 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9525705828 50.4703680194 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.5 104.977214359 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4166666667 20.9669160288 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 7.25397266985 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 2.75862068966 254% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345318440649 0.242375264174 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110537755217 0.0925447433944 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988359992384 0.071462118173 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198598642077 0.151781067708 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842882456234 0.0609392437508 138% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 12.6369458128 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 53.1260098522 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.9458128079 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.5310837438 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32886699507 100% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 55.0591133005 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.3980295567 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 55.5555555556 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 50.0 Out of 90
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