Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar consumption.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Population of overweight people is increasing in almost each and every country in the world. One of the main reasons for this is said to be the intake of sweet foods. Due to this there has been an increasing debate on the measure to be adopted to control cold drinks which contain high levels of sugar. One group argues that the best way to limit the usage is by increasing taxes on these products whereas other group prefers educating people. This essay will explain why educating people is the right step to control the sale of sugary drinks.
Increased taxes has never led to the decrease in sales of the product. For instance, in most countries cigars and tobacco are heavily taxed however their consumption are always on a rise. In a similar way adding more taxes will not help to control the sale of cola products.
On the other hand creating awareness can be a more effective tool to fight obesity caused due to the intake of sugary drinks. For instance, when in India the ill effects of tobacco for both the individual as well as for the society was campaigned effectively, it led to a drastic decline in the sale and consumption of tobacco. Same awareness must be created for drinks with high level of sugar and people should be demotivated from purchasing these products.
As one of the main factors of obesity is the consumption of sugar necessary steps need to be taken to control the sale of the products with high content of sugar particularly cold drinks. This essay has explained why increasing awareness and educating people is the best approach whereas increasing taxes will have very limited results.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: and
...ects of tobacco for both the individual as well as for the society was campaigned effectiv...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...tivated from purchasing these products. As one of the main factors of obesity is t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, well, whereas, as for, for instance, in fact, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 10.5418719212 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 5.94088669951 50% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 20.9802955665 43% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 5.75862068966 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1340.0 1207.87684729 111% => OK
No of words: 283.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73498233216 5.00649968141 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50216602592 2.71678728327 92% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 139.433497537 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501766784452 0.580463131201 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 426.6 379.143842365 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.57093596059 95% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 0.0 1.56157635468 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.5024630542 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.7507587252 50.4703680194 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.076923077 104.977214359 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7692307692 20.9669160288 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 7.25397266985 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265239430671 0.242375264174 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950747570062 0.0925447433944 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0544694944579 0.071462118173 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164455511936 0.151781067708 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333173173897 0.0609392437508 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 12.6369458128 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.1260098522 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.9458128079 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 11.5310837438 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32886699507 97% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 55.0591133005 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.94827586207 106% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.3980295567 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 63.0 Out of 90
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