One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing, is this a curse or blessing?

Elevation in technology has not only attributed to scientific discoveries but also created a hand-in-hand impact in the field of medicine. This century is well blessed with comprehensive medical care and the lifespan of people has enhanced through the modern medicines and treatments. I believe the result has enlightened the human civilisation and the disadvantages of increasing life expectancy are ignorable.

Nowadays people are more health conscious with diet restrictions, daily workouts and routine check-ups. Ultra-modern facilities and advanced medicines have transformed the situation and cured many deadly diseases. With improved lifespan, people contribute more to the society. Early retirement plans let them start another profession as they are more active these days. For instance, many professionals these days start their own business after their retirement. This trend welcomes new comers to have jobs and eradicate unemployment.

As a direct result of improved life-expectancy, people can spend more time with their family and grandchildren. Working parents can leave their children on a safe hand while at work. The way grandparents care for their grandchildren is incomparable to the attention they would receive from a day-care centre. From this regards, we need our forefathers to be with us than ever before. The way many see the elder generation as a responsibility to the society is no longer true. These elder people can share their experience that we can use to build a better and safer world. Older politicians, bankers, writers and researchers have far more to offer than young ones.

Improved lifespan profoundly benefits the family as well the society. We should feel obliged to treat our ancestors as they did for us. They are no longer a burden, but assets for the country.

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Average: 7.7 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, while, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 10.5418719212 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 8.36945812808 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 5.94088669951 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 20.9802955665 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 31.9359605911 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1207.87684729 127% => OK
No of words: 283.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43462897527 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06614026865 2.71678728327 113% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 139.433497537 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621908127208 0.580463131201 107% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 379.143842365 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 12.6551724138 150% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.5024630542 68% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7375416975 50.4703680194 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.9473684211 104.977214359 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.8947368421 20.9669160288 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.31578947368 7.25397266985 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 6.9802955665 172% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 2.91625615764 137% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170698875853 0.242375264174 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486171231553 0.0925447433944 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539795662238 0.071462118173 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100823466017 0.151781067708 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503821603494 0.0609392437508 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 12.6369458128 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 53.1260098522 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.9458128079 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.62 11.5310837438 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32886699507 109% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 55.0591133005 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.3980295567 73% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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