Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, the speedy changes of the world technology lead entertainment industry to become ahead of many sectors in our lives. A fastest growing popularity of stars in different fields is a controversial topic that is discussed almost everywhere in the world. To my way of thinking, people who are getting fame in the 21st century are highly-paid workers.
On the one hand, I reckon that people are equal in every aspect so as our professions such as actors and doctors. Owing to the fact that we can divide employment world into two sectors we will understand that professions that serve mass entertainment requirements and whose working process can be seen on television are highly profitable, compared to those who are working in offices for long hours. In fact, these kinds of professionals can be more beneficial for society as well as for government than those who are famous from televisions. For instance, if we compare architects salary to famous musicians or pop stars income we can vividly see a sharp difference between them.
On the other hand, a vast majority of TV stars such as movie stars or even sports icons have appropriate financial rewards that accurately suit its working standards as well as their high professionalism. For instance, Emma Watson who is a worldwide famous star should have a high income. We cannot deny the fact that high financial rewards can encourage people to improve themselves in terms of career. Some people believe that this kind of attitude will lead our entertainment industry to industrial prosperity.
In conclusion, I would like to say that after discussing both sides of argument my sentiments are on par with the idea that entertainers who are famous from the blue screen should have equal financial rewards as people working at other important sectors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use 'the' with the superlative.
Suggestion: The
...ome ahead of many sectors in our lives. A fastest growing popularity of stars in ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, well, as for, for instance, i reckon, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 6.10837438424 180% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 8.36945812808 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 5.94088669951 269% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 20.9802955665 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1207.87684729 126% => OK
No of words: 300.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06 5.00649968141 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89360213805 2.71678728327 107% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 139.433497537 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576666666667 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 379.143842365 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.65517241379 164% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.2011710128 50.4703680194 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.5 104.977214359 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.9669160288 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.25397266985 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 2.75862068966 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0920047184252 0.242375264174 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340524750471 0.0925447433944 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0330165511973 0.071462118173 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0527585231232 0.151781067708 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0216920755647 0.0609392437508 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 12.6369458128 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 11.5310837438 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.32886699507 102% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 55.0591133005 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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