Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.Choose which position you most a

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Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.

Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.

Currently there has been a contentious topic regarding to advertisements in educational environment. Many people argue that posting ads in schools is a great idea to attract funds and resources, while others are strongly against it because it is potentially prone to harm children's development. Though as far as I am concerned, the negative impacts of placing ads in schools outweigh the positive ones. Hence in this essay, I shall provide my points of view on the regarding topic and also conclude them with reasonable supports.

To begin with, school should always be a safe environment for students instead of the place for promoting products or sponsorships. Although, schools may lose the chance to improve their facilities without the support of advertisements, those ads are prone to exploit students and captivate them as toys and commercialised products.

Moreover, the emerge of advance technology has brought to schools an urgent mission to improve their equipments in order to provide a better learning experience for students. Yet advertising seems to cope well with the requirements, it is prone to be problematic in the long run because of its hidden exploitations on children.

In conclusion, a non-toxic educational environment is crucial and important for the development of our young children, hence preventing ads and similar products will improve the quality of it.

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Average: 7.9 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 404, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... in schools outweigh the positive ones. Hence in this essay, I shall provide my point...
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Line 5, column 11, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... commercialised products. Moreover, the emerge of advance technology has brought to sc...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to experience'
Suggestion: to experience
...s in order to provide a better learning experience for students. Yet advertising seems to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, may, moreover, regarding, so, well, while, as to, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 6.10837438424 65% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 5.94088669951 17% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 20.9802955665 76% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 31.9359605911 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1177.0 1207.87684729 97% => OK
No of words: 219.0 242.827586207 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37442922374 5.00649968141 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.92707691288 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17497748942 2.71678728327 117% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 139.433497537 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.639269406393 0.580463131201 110% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 379.143842365 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6551724138 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3769700582 50.4703680194 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.777777778 104.977214359 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3333333333 20.9669160288 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1111111111 7.25397266985 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 6.9802955665 72% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224949472044 0.242375264174 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843086009158 0.0925447433944 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427497720788 0.071462118173 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123841647996 0.151781067708 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453079162989 0.0609392437508 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 12.6369458128 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.1260098522 89% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.9458128079 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 11.5310837438 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 55.0591133005 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.94827586207 116% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 79.4444444444 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 71.5 Out of 90
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