Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Some people believe that placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, while others believe that it exploits students by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors. I firmly agree with using advertisements in public schools.
From a social point of view, placing advertisements in schools is indeed bound to source of income , which means it might lead to both negative contents and explicit contexts. For instance a group of scientists working at a prestigious university conducted a longitudinal study to understand the relationship between encouraging violence and nudity as well as using new products. Therefore, this evidence thus far support the contention that showing advertisements is correlated to both damaging mental health and decrease sanity of children.
Moreover, in political terms, role models is undoubtedly attributable to students’ age, in that it would lead to great resources, inappropriateness and education problems. A well-known example of such attribution is smoking advertisements which is cause for concern that it had been mistaken in taking fitness of students for granted. Had it loved gaining money in advance, it might have had the opportunity to endangering children’s’ life. Thus, sanity of students could play a significant role in advertisements.
To recapitulate, I entirely agree that advertisements should be place in schools in order to gain financial resources. However, as every garden may have some weeds, local authorities are recommended to enforce some strain legislations and individuals heighten their intellect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 31.9359605911 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.75862068966 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1207.87684729 117% => OK
No of words: 245.0 242.827586207 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.77959183673 5.00649968141 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.51704723556 2.71678728327 129% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 139.433497537 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644897959184 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 379.143842365 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.5024630542 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1823833329 50.4703680194 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.727272727 104.977214359 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2727272727 20.9669160288 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27272727273 7.25397266985 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.33497536946 37% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344172447387 0.242375264174 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108585959425 0.0925447433944 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167727154477 0.071462118173 235% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213256119287 0.151781067708 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.203156552 0.0609392437508 333% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 12.6369458128 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 53.1260098522 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.9458128079 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.54 11.5310837438 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.32886699507 121% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 55.0591133005 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.94827586207 146% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.3980295567 104% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.5123152709 162% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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