Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Recently, the phenomenon of placing advertisements in school and its corresponding impacts have sparked a heated debate around the world. Although contested by many that putting advertisements in schools or colleges is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and consequently positive by a substantial number of individuals. However, I am inclined to believe that it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
At the outset and from a general standpoint, commercial ads in schools is an excellent way to collect more funds, which can facilitate the school in providing better education and infrastructure to kids. For example, according to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered that by putting ads we could improve the overall situation of the school. Thus, the beneficial ramification of placing advertisements in schools can be apparently seen.
Within the realm of the education system, the introduction of commercial posters and billboards in schools proves to be a negative experience for pupils as it has devastating effects on their psychology. To illustrate, scientific research conducted by a renowned organization has asserted that the academic performance of students was drastically down when TV commercials and posters were showed in schools. Hence it is correct to presume the preconceived notion of this remarkable phenomenon.
To recapitulate, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that putting ads in schools or universities treat the school kids as a captive audience for corporate customers. Not only do the advantage of this unique phenomenon prove the significance of overall outcomes, but also pinpoint thorny issues potential implications.
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, consequently, hence, however, if, so, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.5418719212 95% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 6.10837438424 49% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 8.36945812808 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.75862068966 226% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1207.87684729 131% => OK
No of words: 277.0 242.827586207 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71119133574 5.00649968141 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 3.92707691288 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3807155999 2.71678728327 124% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 139.433497537 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.624548736462 0.580463131201 108% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 379.143842365 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.4433982031 50.4703680194 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.818181818 104.977214359 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 20.9669160288 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72727272727 7.25397266985 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27066640396 0.242375264174 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100304539905 0.0925447433944 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0907706888414 0.071462118173 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159901528766 0.151781067708 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078946151015 0.0609392437508 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 12.6369458128 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 53.1260098522 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.54236453202 199% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.9458128079 141% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.13 11.5310837438 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.41 8.32886699507 125% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 55.0591133005 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.94827586207 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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