Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools to promote learning in children life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion
Recently, the phenomenon of teaching music in schools and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate.
Although contested by many that the matter of learning musical instruments is highly beneficial, such issue regarded
thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that
educating children by art can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
From an educational standpoint, considering the music course in schools timetable can provide society with some
noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that merits of improving cognitive skills, as well as developing artistical
aspects of the youth, are inextricably bound up. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I
performed an academic experiment which discovered the ability to play piano help students to learn algebra formula.
Thus beneficial ramifications of both learning process improvement and musical skills development apparently can be
seen.
Within the realm of social abilities, music lessons might decrease the consequences of self-confidence problems in
students. Moreover, fundamental aspects of playing an instrument as a career could relate to this reality that the
demerits of graduated job crisis pertain to lack of efficient expertise to live in a real society. As a tangible example,
some scientific research undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that the downside of spending time on
music is correlated negatively with study distractions. Hence, it is corrected to presume the preconceived notion of
musical learning activities.
To conclude, while there are several compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that the benefits of
music education far outweigh its drawbacks. Not only, do the advantages of gaining knowledge about art prove the
significance of spiritual demands for music, but also pinpoint musical taste.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 20.9802955665 86% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 31.9359605911 138% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.75862068966 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 1207.87684729 142% => OK
No of words: 294.0 242.827586207 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.84013605442 5.00649968141 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1926964556 2.71678728327 118% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 139.433497537 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.666666666667 0.580463131201 115% => OK
syllable_count: 525.6 379.143842365 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.57093596059 115% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.71428571429 292% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.65517241379 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3314452791 50.4703680194 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.083333333 104.977214359 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.9669160288 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.41666666667 7.25397266985 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 18.0 4.12807881773 436% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.33497536946 487% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 6.9802955665 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150547385514 0.242375264174 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.053152953077 0.0925447433944 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0273548417275 0.071462118173 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0462286311014 0.151781067708 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452993910687 0.0609392437508 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 12.6369458128 145% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 53.1260098522 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.9458128079 137% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.89 11.5310837438 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.11 8.32886699507 133% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 55.0591133005 212% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.94827586207 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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