Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools to promote learning in children life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Some say that music is as important as other subjects in schools to promote learning in children life. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

Recently, the importance of music in schools has sparked an ongoing controversy, which inevitably leads to a moot question "what are the positive and negative effect of learning music in schools?". Whereas it is a widely held view that it is not beneficial, I will discuss controversial aspects of that throughout this essay.

From the educational system standpoint, learning materials are bound up inextricably with syllabus, which indicates they lead to both oral examination and written assignment. As a well-known example, a longitudinal study conducted by eminent scientists in 2018 demonstrates the relationship between music learning and art subjects as well as an exponential increase in student's performance. Their academic criticism was impressive. Consequently, my empirical evidence presented thus far supports the contention that the likelihood of formal education is correlated positively with not only new teaching methods but also traditional assessment.

Within the realm of psychology, without the slightest doubt, music attribute to mental health, in that it would come down to less stress, less depression, and creativity. A salient example of such attribution is extracurricular activity which is a cause for concern since it was mistaken to take leisure time for granted. Had there been a paradigm shift earlier, scholars might have had the opportunity to pinpoint ignoring practical skill problems. Likewise, hardly had they confined their attention to course scheduling, piano teacher, and even exercise. Hence, it is reasonable to infer the pivotal role of music study in schools in promoting in children life and future job opportunity.

To conclude, as for myself, as the saying goes "all's well that ends well," after analyzing what elaborated above, I firmly believe that the importance of music learning in schools are of high significance. However, with the benefit of hindsight, we conceive the more we research, the further we discover.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, likewise, so, thus, well, whereas, as for, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.5418719212 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 6.10837438424 49% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 5.94088669951 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 20.9802955665 110% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 31.9359605911 132% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.75862068966 226% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1207.87684729 142% => OK
No of words: 301.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.71760797342 5.00649968141 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20524839739 2.71678728327 118% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 139.433497537 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.667774086379 0.580463131201 115% => OK
syllable_count: 524.7 379.143842365 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 4.0 1.56157635468 256% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.65517241379 192% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4724031305 50.4703680194 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.384615385 104.977214359 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1538461538 20.9669160288 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.53846153846 7.25397266985 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.33497536946 75% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 2.75862068966 109% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163735731521 0.242375264174 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0467532527822 0.0925447433944 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657398837791 0.071462118173 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913828577377 0.151781067708 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254614473575 0.0609392437508 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 12.6369458128 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.1260098522 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.9458128079 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 11.5310837438 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.65 8.32886699507 128% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 55.0591133005 203% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.94827586207 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 76.5 Out of 90
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