Successful sportsstars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)
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Successful sportsstars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do u support it or not? (Agree/Disagree)
PTE Academic , PTE ESSAYS , Writing
PTE ESSAY Role Model For Youngsters
role model for youngsters
Today, many youngsters follow celebrities like sports and movie stars as their role model. This can be seen on all over social media. It is disagreed to follow successful sports person or glamorous movie star. This will be shown by taking into account immoral acts of these sports personalities and derogatory roles played by film stars.
To begin with, recently many cases have been published of athletes using illegal steroids. This may influence their innocent followers negatively. For example, a few years ago, Lance Armstrong, 7 times winner of Tour de France was found guilty of using performance enhancer drugs. It goes without saying that, youngsters must be discouraged to follow such sports stars.
Furthermore, it’s often seen that glamorous film stars play derogatory roles in movies. For instance, Sanjay Dutt, a famous actor from Indian cinemas often plays a role of mafia and villain: taking drugs, robbing banks and living a lavish lifestyle. This sets a bad example for adolescents. It is obvious from this example that movies stars shouldn’t be ideal role models. Thus, youngster’s admiration of these personalities should not be supported.
This analysis proves that all successful sports stars and film stars may not be ideal role models. In a nutshell, youngsters should not be supported to follow these jazzy personalities blindly. It is recommended to teach youth to follow virtuous characters.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 8.36945812808 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 5.94088669951 67% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 20.9802955665 100% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 31.9359605911 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1207.87684729 133% => OK
No of words: 289.0 242.827586207 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53979238754 5.00649968141 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96811360337 2.71678728327 109% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 139.433497537 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553633217993 0.580463131201 95% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 379.143842365 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.6157635468 195% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.71428571429 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 12.6551724138 158% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.5024630542 68% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.9690057378 50.4703680194 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.05 104.977214359 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.45 20.9669160288 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 7.25397266985 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.12807881773 218% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.33497536946 112% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 6.9802955665 186% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 2.75862068966 217% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.508713142262 0.242375264174 210% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153843412444 0.0925447433944 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.206184101019 0.071462118173 289% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.342381627795 0.151781067708 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.276681680345 0.0609392437508 454% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 12.6369458128 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 53.1260098522 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.54236453202 47% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.9458128079 80% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.26 11.5310837438 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32886699507 103% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 55.0591133005 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.94827586207 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.3980295567 73% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.5123152709 86% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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