Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. This rise moves in tandem with the growth in violent media. Thus, the conclusion can be drawn that violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. Do you agree or disagree?
Recently, fighting against violence in social media has been the subject of debate in several societies. There are a vast number of people who interpret the impact of various media as thoroughly constructive, while others hold a negative attitude. Personally, I strongly disagree with the assertion that any medium could have adverse effects on individuals.
To begin with, there are numerous compelling reasons why I do not support banning some means of communication devices. First of all, it is maintained that any medium plays a pivotal role in creating adroit people. This may be attributed to the fact that some of their programs arouse a wonderful feeling of accomplishment and competence which consequently can result in opening avenues to new achievements. Therefore, their enthusiasm and self-confidence will be amplified towards several daunting tasks. Specifically, a recent extensive study conducted by Isfahan University of Technology (IUT) has revealed that watching a reasonable amount of TV could boost a person`s intellectual ability to make deliberate decisions related to social and private life.
Furthermore, it is presumed that they could boost children`s logical abilities. To put it more simply, it is believed that if individuals want to have a prosperous future, they should know that spending the appropriate amount of time on satellite or the Internet networks can result in being more knowledgeable which makes us more beneficial to the society. In my experience, with the advent of virtual conference platforms such as Skype, people are able to have face to face interviews with minimum effort.
Due to the reasons mentioned above, although there are several compelling arguments in favor of both sides, my personal sentiment is that people should have access to different source of programs. That is because they can make us more logical, creative, helpful for our community and country.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, such as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 8.36945812808 60% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 5.94088669951 202% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 20.9802955665 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 31.9359605911 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.75862068966 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1207.87684729 136% => OK
No of words: 300.0 242.827586207 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46333333333 5.00649968141 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 3.92707691288 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09780388161 2.71678728327 114% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 139.433497537 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643333333333 0.580463131201 111% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 379.143842365 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.6157635468 195% => OK
Article: 1.0 1.56157635468 64% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.931034482759 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.4785285076 50.4703680194 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.076923077 104.977214359 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0769230769 20.9669160288 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.25397266985 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.33497536946 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 6.9802955665 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105280463054 0.242375264174 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0344163451482 0.0925447433944 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0267803351297 0.071462118173 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601724873185 0.151781067708 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295018489598 0.0609392437508 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 12.6369458128 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 53.1260098522 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.9458128079 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 11.5310837438 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.51 8.32886699507 126% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 55.0591133005 198% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.94827586207 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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