writing a letter of proposal for the location of the company s new coffee

Essay topics:

writing a letter of proposal for the location of the company' s new coffee.

Introduction:
This proposal is intended to thoroughly evaluate the benefits and drawbacks of the unused store room and the unused office, which are potential locations for the company' s new area.
Facilities
the unused office is not as appropriate as the other in terms of amenities.the store-room has limited space, yet the water supply system, which is of almost importance for running a coffee, is already available. in addition, on the basic of a narrow and dark space, it could be transformed into a standing coffee bar with gentle artificial light to hold close conversations among staffs in the company, which could faster their relationship. the spacious office with nature light favored by several personnel, on the other hand, should be utilized as a conference chamber as a practical alternative.
Location
As the most staffs do not display any clear bias toward either the office or the store room, the options are roughly equal. However, when questioned, more than a few employees expresses their considerable concern about the manager's room which is right next to the unused office. As the result, it would be a good idea to select the store room ny virtue of its connivent situation.
Expenditure
the renovation of the store room would be more economical as facilities are virtually free provided. Meanwhile, it would be excessively costly if the company had to invest money in tables and chairs as well as water system for the unused office. i propose we should spend that amount of money buying an espresso machine and water cooker as staffs' expectation.
Conclusion
After considering all the criteria, i feel certain that the store room would be an ideal location for the coffee. i, therefore, hope my proposal will be given due consideration.

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Average: 7.6 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... which could faster their relationship. the spacious office with nature light favor...
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...oposal will be given due consideration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, therefore, well, while, as to, i feel, in addition, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 6.10837438424 147% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 20.9802955665 62% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 31.9359605911 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 5.75862068966 174% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1207.87684729 123% => OK
No of words: 291.0 242.827586207 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10309278351 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84991418128 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 139.433497537 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59793814433 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 470.7 379.143842365 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.6157635468 130% => OK
Article: 5.0 1.56157635468 320% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.5024630542 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7528358669 50.4703680194 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.75 104.977214359 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.9669160288 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 7.25397266985 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.12807881773 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.33497536946 169% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151382757959 0.242375264174 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570207200974 0.0925447433944 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0668365526047 0.071462118173 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100993062646 0.151781067708 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0826049773843 0.0609392437508 136% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 12.6369458128 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 53.1260098522 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.9458128079 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.5310837438 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.32886699507 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 55.0591133005 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.94827586207 191% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.3980295567 112% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.5123152709 124% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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