In my opinion, some young adults want independence from their parents is the better situation because young adults should go out from there families and pursue their dreams. Gaining an independence, once the high school is finished is a good oppurtunity for a young student to pursue their graduation. "Life is full of challenges".
There are many reasons the young student should be independent from their parents
The first reason is that they will learn to handle any situations like education point of view. How to achieve goals. The young student will be more dedecated to his goals without any ones help like parents help. Such type of issues will be handled if they are independent.
The second reason is that they will learn to handle financial situations by working in a university campus library where they can work as well as they can study their subjects. At the same they are paid for those campus jobs. By this situation they learn to manage their studies, job and financial matters too.
The third reason is that they will come to know how to face the world, by experiencing different situations at different places like university campus, meeting different people, getting aquainted with different cultures.
In this way the young adult will enjoy his / her freedom.
Sentence: Gaining an independence, once the high school is finished is a good oppurtunity for a young student to pursue their graduation.
Error: oppurtunity Suggestion: opportunity
Sentence: The young student will be more dedecated to his goals without any ones help like parents help.
Error: dedecated Suggestion: dedicated
Sentence: The third reason is that they will come to know how to face the world, by experiencing different situations at different places like university campus, meeting different people, getting aquainted with different cultures.
Error: aquainted Suggestion: acquainted
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Score: 17 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 215 350
No. of Characters: 1041 1500
No. of Different Words: 123 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.829 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.842 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.431 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 70 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 48 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 28 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 24 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.962 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.417 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.63 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.05 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5