The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart compares the proportion of male and female in various age groups who participate in physical exercise regularly in Australia in 2010.

It is noticeable that the gender patterns for different age were varied, expect for 65 and over group, which men and women had almost similar figure.

As for men, 15-24 years old group has the highest percentage, 52.8% of male had the habit of doing exercise regularly, while only 47.7% of their female counterparts had this habit. Men in other age groups are less active, the figure declined gradually to 39.5% when they were 35 to 44 years old, then the percentage saw a slightly increase as men grew older. There were always more women involving physical activity excluding the youngest age group. 52.5% of female aged between 35 and 44 did regular exercise while only 43.1% of male in this age group did so.

Overall, the majority of women were engaged in exercise regularly compared to men with the exception of age group of 15-24 years old.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...o 44 years old, then the percentage saw a slightly increase as men grew older. There were always mo...
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Line 7, column 83, Rule ID: WITH_THE_EXCEPTION_OF[1]
Message: Use simply 'except' or 'except for'
Suggestion: except; except for
...d in exercise regularly compared to men with the exception of age group of 15-24 years old.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 835.0 965.302439024 87% => OK
No of words: 172.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85465116279 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62144681703 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38960561204 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610465116279 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 258.3 283.868780488 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5727636558 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.285714286 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5714285714 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85714285714 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254655073269 0.215688989381 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136638472648 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588129237495 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168042109094 0.15604864568 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491188988198 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 40.7170731707 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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