TPO-42 - Integrated Writing Task Glass is a favored building material for modern architecture, yet it is also very dangerous for wild birds. Because they often cannot distinguish between glass and open air, millions of birds are harmed every year when the

The article states that using lucid glasses in architecture treaten the birds life and there are three solutions that can solve this problem. However, the professor explains none of the author's reasons are convincing and refutes them one by one.

First, One-Way Glass can help birds to avoid going through windows because birds do not see other side of the window and understand that it is obstcle infront of them and avoid to go straight forward through it. As the reading claims, is refuted by the professor . He asserts that this glasses are same as mirror and birds do not identify the mirror picture of trees or other things and the might think its different trees and go toward it.

Second, Colorful Designs may cause a situation in which although people from inside of building do not see the design, birds from outside can see it and prevent to go toward window. Nevertheless, the professor argues that it is not possible to make this design because if this designs are invisible for humans inside bulding it must be too small, so birds do not see this designs too and if they want to make it clear for birds they must increase the designs size but it make inside of building dark.

Finally, magnetic fields can aware birds from obstcle that are face to them. On the contrary, professor states that birds only use their magnetic sense in long travels, instead for short travels they use their eyes and brightness of lights.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'birds'' or 'bird's'?
Suggestion: birds'; bird's
...cid glasses in architecture treaten the birds life and there are three solutions that...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 172, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid going', 'avoid gonna'.
Suggestion: avoid going; avoid gonna
... that it is obstcle infront of them and avoid to go straight forward through it. As the rea...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ding claims, is refuted by the professor . He asserts that this glasses are same a...
^^
Line 5, column 472, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'makes'?
Suggestion: makes
...y must increase the designs size but it make inside of building dark. Finally, ma...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.4613686534 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 5.04856512141 158% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 12.0772626932 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 22.412803532 134% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 30.3222958057 92% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 5.01324503311 20% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1189.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 251.0 270.72406181 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73705179283 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24462559045 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 145.348785872 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.545816733068 0.540411800872 101% => OK
syllable_count: 352.8 419.366225166 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.23620309051 36% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 13.0662251656 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 21.2450331126 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.9263012385 49.2860985944 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.111111111 110.228320801 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8888888889 21.698381199 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88888888889 7.06452816374 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43101175489 0.272083759551 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160802957237 0.0996497079465 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932773313357 0.0662205650399 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234128695725 0.162205337803 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041036384929 0.0443174109184 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.3589403974 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.99 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 63.6247240618 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.7273730684 98% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.498013245 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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