TPO 36- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universit

Nowadyas, it is commonly accepted that the primary schools have key role to rising the education value of each countries. Contrary, to this popular beliefs there are still those who argue that the government budget should be cocentarte mostly in universities because, people who have this ability of arrive to the universities are person with bruliant miands and governments managers should be try to growing and riseing their talents. But it is nor clear that all of students that going to the basic schools are enough talented to can arrive into the universities, so providing more fundation in this portion not reasonable. I, o a great extent agree with this idea that for successful development of a country, the governments should be serve considerable fundation for primary schools than universities.

First and foremost, it is true that all of children that all of children that going to the schools do not arrive to the universities in the future, but the most precentage of population of a country do not build just by academic educated people. A lot of children have considerable ability on some activities like hand works or cooking or ect. Our primary educatin system should be powerful enough to can evolution and developed each of students based on their special talents and abilities. Because, our society need to valuable person on all fields and aspects.

On another significant fact that should be taken into the consideration is that if our children have weekness on their basic knowledge, they never cannot become very practical engineers or scientists. Because, this lack in this basci knowledge remaind with us and do not change very simple. For example, now we can see that a lot of people have difficulty for calculating some very simple numbers and most of the people used calculators.

Finally, yet importantly, take attention to primary schools shape society that it is beuty and culm for all of people in the country. But, Because, it can improving the level of ethics and mental healthy and happiness for all of people not just samll portion of the society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...le in the country. But, Because, it can improving the level of ethics and mental healthy ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, so, still, for example, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1748.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 348.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02298850575 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76988838679 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514367816092 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0691194805 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.461538462 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7692307692 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53846153846 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155247627582 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582807231462 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580515655973 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956938782667 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0239914157754 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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