TPO-31 - Integrated Writing Task A fossil skeleton of a dinosaur called Sinosauropteryx, preserved in volcanic ash, was discovered in Liaoning, China, in 1996. Interestingly, the fossil included a pattern of fine lines surrounding the skeletal bones. Some

The reading and the lecture are both about the fine line found in a fossil skeleton of a dinosaur in China. The passage offers three evidences to oppose the theory that the fine lines are not feathers. However, the scholar thinks all of the claims in the article are unconvincing, and she provides three refutations.

To start with, the reading points out that fine lines are not the functional structures of a living dinosaur but the structures of a dead animal. That is to say, fine lines may be the skin which decomposed into fibers. Nevertheless, the lecturer challenges the point by mentioning that functional structures also found in the same site, which shows that functional structures can be well preserved. As a result, the fine lines are definitely not fibers caused by decomposition.

Secondly, the reading passage contends that the fine lines may be the frills of dinosaurs instead of feathers. Nonetheless, the lecturer states that researchers found there are a kind of protein found in fine lines which also contained in feathers. However, frills don't have this kind of protein. Thus, fine lines are not frills for sure.

Last, the article maintains that the function of feathers is to enable animals to fly or regulate their internal temperature but the fine lines were mostly located along the backbone and the tail, which means helpless for flight. Conversely, the scholar put forth the idea by maintaining that peacocks have colorful feathers for the display function. Also, the scientists found the colorful orange and red lines in the backbone of the animals, which strongly supports the idea that the backbone feathers are for display function.

In sum, the professor effectively casts doubts on all of the claims presented in the article.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...t feathers. However, the scholar thinks all of the claims in the article are unconvincing,...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 180, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'kinds'?
Suggestion: kinds
...ates that researchers found there are a kind of protein found in fine lines which al...
^^^^
Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... contained in feathers. However, frills dont have this kind of protein. Thus, fine l...
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Line 9, column 51, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...e professor effectively casts doubts on all of the claims presented in the article.
^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, however, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, thus, well, kind of, as a result, to start with, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 5.04856512141 59% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 22.412803532 58% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 30.3222958057 112% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 291.0 270.72406181 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10309278351 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.04702891845 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67706637576 2.5805825403 104% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 145.348785872 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481099656357 0.540411800872 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 448.2 419.366225166 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.5475529164 49.2860985944 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 21.698381199 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.93333333333 7.06452816374 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 4.33554083885 208% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398359342801 0.272083759551 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145576830548 0.0996497079465 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847422463564 0.0662205650399 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19657980633 0.162205337803 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107105738807 0.0443174109184 242% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.3589403974 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.2367328918 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.42419426049 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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