TPO-33 - Integrated Writing Task Carved stone balls are a curious type of artifact found at a number of locations in Scotland. They date from the late Neolithic period, around 4,000 years ago. They are round in shape; they were carved from several types o

While the issue both the reading and listening focus on is the purpose and use of carved stone balls, which are round in shape and found at some areas in Scotland, the listening casts doubt at three main points.
At the first point, the reading states that some stone balls were found having holes and grooves on them, which proves that they may be used in hunting or fighting as weapons. According to the listening, weapons like arrows or hand axes have the science of wear. However, the stone balls do not show the same science. Instead of having crack and small pieces broke, stone balls have their surface well preserved, which strengthen the argument that stone balls were not used as weapons. This is a direct contradiction to what is indicated in the reading passage.
At the second point, the reading believes that the stone balls were used as a standard weight system for the purpose of trade since their size are uniform. On the contrary, the listening argues that stone balls were made of different types of stone such as sand stone and grind stone, which have different density. Although they share the same size, there is a likelihood that these stone balls have different weight. Therefore, stone balls cannot be used as the primitive weight system. This is an important point that was not considered by the author of the reading.
At the last point, the reading mentions that some stone balls were designed elaborately, which helps to make the case that stone balls may be used to mark social status. However, the listening confirms that many stone balls were caved with patterns that look very simple. In addition, when someone passed away at that time, they would be buried with their personal possession, but no stone balls have been found in tombs or graves. Accordingly, the idea that stone balls were used to mark personal social status is not convincing. This is yet another example of how the professor and the author of the reading contradict one another.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: round
...nd use of carved stone balls, which are round in shape and found at some areas in Scotland, th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, however, if, look, may, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, such as, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 5.04856512141 79% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 7.30242825607 164% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 12.0772626932 157% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 22.412803532 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1646.0 1373.03311258 120% => OK
No of words: 342.0 270.72406181 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81286549708 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.25076506264 2.5805825403 87% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 145.348785872 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497076023392 0.540411800872 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 2.5761589404 272% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5740726044 49.2860985944 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.875 110.228320801 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 21.698381199 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06452816374 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 4.33554083885 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.572782299914 0.272083759551 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214338029768 0.0996497079465 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118025028414 0.0662205650399 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.368215372654 0.162205337803 227% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1121503881 0.0443174109184 253% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.3589403974 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 53.8541721854 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.0289183223 93% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.2367328918 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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