Television advertising’s aim at young children has been a debatable issue for years. Parents argue that television advertising should not be allowed to direct towards young children. Personally, I strongly agree with this argument.
First and foremost, what I put in my priority is physical health. The fact is that when television advertising is designed to aim at children, editor will put in some fictional action such as a man flying or a man using sword to fight against evils. Therefore, it is likely to capture children’s attention. Since they are too young to tell what is right and what is wrong, children have a tendency to imitate what they see on television. These actions may be very dangerous because it’s not real and children can harm the own health if they copy these actions. More importantly, many cartoon characters will be used in advertising which is aimed directly at children. Accordingly, they are bound to be attracted to these advertisements. There is a likelihood that children spend lots of time on those advertisement. Their eyesight will be badly damaged by exposing to the TV screen for too long. As a result, television advertising is a main factor contributing to worsen children’s physical health.
In the second place, family attachment is undoubtedly of paramount importance. It is widely known that companies just want to sell their product through advertising. Accordingly, they are bound to magnify the use of their products, which is appealing to children. As a result, when children ask their parents for these products and get rejected, they will change their look about their parents. More seriously, when television advertisements’ goal is to aim at children, they are bound to have funny content. Children between the age of two and five are still immature and they don’t have time-management skills. Therefore, children will have a tendency to devote their time watching these interesting TV advertisement. It creates a barrier which prevents children from communicating with their parents. Without doubt, advertisement on TV critically affects family bonding.
On the other hand, some people might say that television advertising has great amount of valuable information. Therefore, it will improve children’s knowledge and awareness. However, this opinion is not always true. In fact, in order to increase company’s revenue, the advertisement designers have a tendency to distort the truth about their products. Furthermore, television advertisement not only provides incorrect information but also harms children’s mental health. There are many uncensored advertisement which will badly affect children’s way of thinking. Children are easily affected by the bad message that the advertisements convey. Accordingly, their awareness and behavior will be wrongly shaped and it will result in negative consequence in the future. Beyond any doubt, the idea that television advertisement directed towards young children will improve their awareness is often possible to end in collapse.
In conclusion, physical state, family bonding, awareness deterioration are convincing reasons for my agreement. It is highly recommended that readers should take my writing into careful consideration.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 807, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'those advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; those advertisements
...ood that children spend lots of time on those advertisement. Their eyesight will be badly damaged b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2794.0 1977.66487455 141% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59919839679 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32122114856 2.67179642975 124% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527054108216 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.6003584229 160% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.3273235956 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6666666667 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1212121212 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.51515151515 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 3.85842293907 363% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1932152772 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580370940777 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054845715805 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134618775012 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732060431342 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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