TPO-26 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.Use specific r

Children’s choice of career has been a global burning issue for many years. When mentioning this essence, varied people will possess diverse opinions. Parents argue that it is necessary for children to consider the jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs rather than different one. Personally, I strongly disagree with this argument.
First and foremost, what I put in my priority is work efficiency. The fact is that when children are urged to choose the job like their parents’ job, they will have a tendency to see their job boring. As a result, there is no doubt that their work performance will be significantly reduced. In the opposite, there is a likelihood that children will thrive in their work when they are able to choose the job that they like. Therefore, they are likely to devote more time finishing their tasks. Given such condition, it goes without saying that their working outcome will be substantially improved. With no doubt, choosing their favorite plays an important role in developing children’ later work performance.
Secondly, job security is undoubtedly of paramount importance. It is widely known that children cannot be competent for what the job they do not like. Nowadays, companies are looking for employees who are able to finish their task before the given deadline. In this competitive and high living cost world, everyone needs to work in order to make the living and meet the bill. Therefore, there is a likelihood that children are able to secure their job when they choose the work they like rather than the jobs similar to their parents’. Without doubt, considering the jobs they like is a major factor contributing to job security.
On the other hand, some people might say that children are able to receive valuable advice and guidance from their parents when they choose the similar jobs. Therefore, it will considerably improve their working skills. However, this opinion is not always true. In fact, technologies have changed increasingly fast since their parents’ generation. Accordingly, parent’s advice may not be true or suitable for in their children’s nowadays work. Furthermore, children will have a tendency to depend on their parents. Whenever they run into troubles, there is a high chance that they will rely heavily on their parents without trying to consider the problem. It will probably have a negative effect on their problem-solving skills in the near future. However, when being able to choose their own career, children are likely to work independently and learn from their mistake. Beyond any doubt, the idea that choosing the same jobs as their parents will improve their work skills is often possible to end in collapse.
In conclusion, work efficiency, job security and work skills are the convincing reasons for my disagreement. It is highly recommended that readers should take my writing into close consideration.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23516949153 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88841902877 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485169491525 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 750.6 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9352049112 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2068965517 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.275862069 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.48275862069 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.85842293907 259% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.431060178613 0.236089414692 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.131773727097 0.076458572812 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125468187489 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277714539293 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096230315987 0.0645574589148 149% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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