The high grade is one of the crucial factors that define the students. About many decades, people concerned about the money prize for the high-grade of the children is right or wrong. From my point of view, it makes thing even worse than the normal and I believe it is better to not award children a money depend on their grade.
Above all, the money prize will give a wrong mentality and imitation for the children. They will weave money from their parents, as a result of everything they do such as chores. Moreover, if this situation lasts long, the child never do anything without money prize that breaks the child's behavior and the respect of their parents. Instead of spending a time with them, give a money as a prize seems the parents pay no attention to them that is the considerably harmful imitation. For example, one of my classmates makes a contradiction with her parents that value everything as a money such as if she washes the dishes, her parents should give her two dollars. She also said that after made a contradiction, she feels no respect for their parents.
Another reason is, the money will create a distance in a relationship between parents and a child. I think if the parents keep giving money to their child as an award, their relationship will become like a worker and employee. Furthermore, the children do things as a favor of money, not because of their dream and passion that has a crucial influence on their future. Also, because children have no interest in homework, they would spend their money and time on trivial things, which drives them into the wrong path. I think giving a money to their children is not a creative and beneficial solution of expressing their love and support. Moreover, because the money breaks interaction between the child and their parents, the children likely to become a gangster.
All in all, we never receive anything like the love of our parents during our lifetime. The cons of giving money to a child as a prize outweigh the pros of it and affect everyone who surrounded the children and most importantly it affects their future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 377, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...tead of spending a time with them, give a money as a prize seems the parents pay no att...
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Line 5, column 534, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'money'.
Suggestion: money
...hem into the wrong path. I think giving a money to their children is not a creative and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73097826087 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52138625483 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475543478261 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 530.1 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1352668897 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.411764706 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64705882353 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221388307958 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848577950507 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348661708839 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136373332556 0.150856017488 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479416893055 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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