Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern society, everyone is able to express their own opinion if they want to because there is no rule against it. Some people believe that the opinion of popular people influences more on younger people rather than the older ones. Nonetheless, others think it influences the mind of everyone equally. From my point of view, celebrities have more impact on young people such as children and kids.
To begin with, because the most popular people are relatively young, the older ones not interested in their opinion at all. Because younger people are dominant in this world, celebrities should be their age in order to attract them. Moreover, the famous ones express themselves through the internet a lot. On the other hand, older people are struggling to adapt to the new different technologies that limit their range of newest information. For example, my grandmother does not use Facebook, Twitter, and other social media, she only watches the news every night that is the main source of information that she obtains. In contrast, I am well-informed about the world more than her maybe because I am close to communication technologies.
Furthermore, elderlies have their own view and perspective on everything. So, the opinion of celebrity cannot impact their solid minds. Moreover, older people have more experience and knowledge about the world and nature than the young celebrities which causes them not to follow their mind like any other young children. I am the ideal example of this. When I and my father discussed the galaxy, I mentioned a lot of people to explain what I think because I have no own idea on this subject. However, he has good examples and explanations for himself that impress me a lot. From that time, I understand that the celebrity and the popular people are people like us, not a robot that has mistake-free. It is better to create my own ideas rather than follow it without a doubt.
All in all, each individual has their own unique personality and behavior. It is meaningless to copy others' opinion even though they are popular or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the newest'.
Suggestion: of the newest
...ent technologies that limit their range of newest information. For example, my grandmothe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, so, well, for example, i think, in contrast, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1729.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92592592593 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67939592199 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532763532764 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.0452362327 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.45 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.55 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182362892037 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564385293149 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0502881192866 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114953936852 0.150856017488 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488073902793 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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