The technology is developing in order to make life easier and engaging to live. Also, the internet and electronic devices provide us with many valuable pieces of information. Nonetheless, the cell phone, online games, and social networks have a more negative impact on children than the positive ones such as holding them back from learning.
Above all, the internet and video games are the most powerful distraction of children. Because they are interesting and entertaining, most children have no resistant from addict to them. As a result, it is hard for teachers to require them to do their homework instead of playing because obviously children will refuse and ignore it. Moreover, because children do not want to face with their teachers and parents, they may escape from home to the place which no one would cease them from playing and wasting time on social media. Researchers also proved that the average education level of people decreasing slightly day by day because of many distractions. I think most children pay more attention to their likes of the photos' on social media rather than their grade and education.
Another reason is that the world becomes more competitive, the teachers take higher requirement to their students. Because of this, students play a video game, use their cell phone and surf on the social media to flee from their duty. Also, the parents are now busy and spend less time with their children which causes to weaken the requirements of parents. From my own experience, when I was in fifth grade, my parents went to Korea for three months. After they went, my grades decrease considerably because I spend the whole time watching a television program and playing video games without anyone who ceases me. I truly understand that the teachers cannot force the students to learn.
All in all, it is really hard when the children distracted and rejected the teacher even though it is the responsibility of them to teach the concept to the children and require them to study it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 320, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'weakening'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: weakening
...s time with their children which causes to weaken the requirements of parents. From my ow...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, nonetheless, really, so, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96460176991 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56611737119 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557522123894 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 519.3 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6179395369 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.1875 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187156350637 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608489461975 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487928204958 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111780384934 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470659692902 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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