Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Electronic technologies have become an inherent part of today's society. Most people cannot live without them because those invented to make life easier and more engaging. Nonetheless, some people think those technologies influence badly on the behavior of people, especially on the young ones. From my point of view, the cons of the movies and television considerably outweigh the pros of it.
To begin with, most movies that filmed nowadays include many suicide scenes that have a negative impact on people. Most children watching movies in their free time to spend it having fun that influences their mind indirectly. Also, because parents work a lot than in the past they have less leisure time to spend with their children to imitate the right things and control what they watch. For example, when the reporter asked from the girl why she killed two innocent children, she answered she wanted to create the movie scene that she watched before.
Furthermore, because of the technological development, the news widespread throughout the world by television even though it is watched by young children or not. I think the children raise between the negative news on a television and the only thing they get is a wrong imitation. Moreover, many shows that appeals people organized a lot which causes the children to addict into the television. That a look at my younger sister as an example. She is three years old and used to addict into television until my parents banned a television from home. Also, there are many young children that behave like monsters when their parents cease them from using the internet or smartphone because they addicted.
All in all, I think that even though the television and the movies provide us with much useful information, most of them leave a wrong imitation for the young ones which causes them to behave like monsters.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, look, moreover, nonetheless, so, for example, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 15.1003584229 26% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1557.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00643086817 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54583605342 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.559485530547 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9896852457 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.8 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.06666666667 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155887416678 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0533904244323 0.076458572812 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0258808688513 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0961817180061 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00443773126144 0.0645574589148 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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